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8/3/2005 c1 9emmathree
Amazing, simply amazing.
6/20/2005 c1 65Thorn's-girl
on word: spectacular
4/22/2005 c1 Aldo
Yay! This is awesome, Molly! I like the poetic style of it and the guy's obsession with the eyelashes. Yes, indeed.

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4/22/2005 c1 55APersonAndAHalf
Ok, uh, I know I'm reviewing my own story here, but I felt need to clarify some things...firstly, this is not the first story I have WRITTEN, this is the first story I have POSTED. Normally, I do not write like this. This is just a twenty minute that resulted from a two hour long car ride at around eleven at night. The poetic and seemingly-nonsensical style was intentional. And yes, Misanthropic Muse, I am addicted to commas.~A. Person
4/22/2005 c1 Poppy Pyres
since this is your first real story i woudl venture to say that you are still thinking poetry. too many commas, like line breaks in poetry. "Never outright complaining, but constantly hinting, I’d always obey his insight, fluttering eyelashes to make him smile. "overuse of commas disrupts the flowi would put:Never outright complaining but constantly hinting, I’d always obey his insight, fluttering my eyelashes to make him smile." not a big deal thoughwell done with speeling adn grammar
4/21/2005 c1 Autumnbffl
Wowser, Moley-os. Didn't know ya had it in ya. That was awesome.*claps appreciatively*

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