for Flawed Perfection4/8/2007 c1 
87Kissing Concrete
it is so sad that so many people try and look perfect because perfection is "in"- it is truely terrible- i like your poem
87Kissing Concreteit is so sad that so many people try and look perfect because perfection is "in"- it is truely terrible- i like your poem
2/11/2007 c1 50Zeurpiet
I really loved this poem, and you're right, it is similar to my own. I like your use of descriptive language; it really made the poem unique. It's well written and sadly true. Thanks for the review =)
50ZeurpietI really loved this poem, and you're right, it is similar to my own. I like your use of descriptive language; it really made the poem unique. It's well written and sadly true. Thanks for the review =)
4/20/2006 c1 18bahaghari
You have a talent for detailed description girlie, and you describe what you see with such clarity.
18bahaghariYou have a talent for detailed description girlie, and you describe what you see with such clarity.
2/18/2006 c1 3Childish Whisper
wow this is very good, i like your detailed description that builds upto 'her cold hard wooden structure' very effective. thanks for commenting on my work btw, but i intended to have an impersonal 'tone', a cold, almost in a way, not elegantly flowing feeling lol anyway thanks again, good job on this poem... especially liked the term 'mannequin' =)
3Childish Whisperwow this is very good, i like your detailed description that builds upto 'her cold hard wooden structure' very effective. thanks for commenting on my work btw, but i intended to have an impersonal 'tone', a cold, almost in a way, not elegantly flowing feeling lol anyway thanks again, good job on this poem... especially liked the term 'mannequin' =)
12/23/2005 c1 80gitana
First off-thanks for the review (and for letting me know my poem was in the wrong section... I must have accidentally clicked 'school' instead of 'love,' but I've fixed it now)!
Now, onto the poem...
Beautiful in a very bitter, envious way-indicative of what you were trying to get at, or so I'm assuming. Good job! I only had one qualm, and that's the use of the word 'cat's-like'. Shouldn't it be 'cat-like'? Or perhaps even 'feline'? Ah, well, you're the poet, and I know I hate it when people tell me how to write, so I'll leave it at that. Kudos, again!
~TGitC
80gitanaFirst off-thanks for the review (and for letting me know my poem was in the wrong section... I must have accidentally clicked 'school' instead of 'love,' but I've fixed it now)!
Now, onto the poem...
Beautiful in a very bitter, envious way-indicative of what you were trying to get at, or so I'm assuming. Good job! I only had one qualm, and that's the use of the word 'cat's-like'. Shouldn't it be 'cat-like'? Or perhaps even 'feline'? Ah, well, you're the poet, and I know I hate it when people tell me how to write, so I'll leave it at that. Kudos, again!
~TGitC
12/21/2005 c1 145transparency93
brilliant. nice structure & very powerful last line. :) keep writing! (and thanks for the review!)
145transparency93brilliant. nice structure & very powerful last line. :) keep writing! (and thanks for the review!)
10/20/2005 c1 7ladyjupiter89
Firstly I would like to say- Thankyou for your review on my Poem! I hope all the other ones I'm still in the process of uploading!Now, about your poems. I have enjoyed all of them, some more than others; Like this poem, for instance. I LOVE IT. You did a very good job of portraying what our culture has turned into. I like the examples you used to portray Human Vanity, ex. bulimic figure. I really have no complaints on this poem at all. Good Job and keep commenting on my poems :)
7ladyjupiter89Firstly I would like to say- Thankyou for your review on my Poem! I hope all the other ones I'm still in the process of uploading!Now, about your poems. I have enjoyed all of them, some more than others; Like this poem, for instance. I LOVE IT. You did a very good job of portraying what our culture has turned into. I like the examples you used to portray Human Vanity, ex. bulimic figure. I really have no complaints on this poem at all. Good Job and keep commenting on my poems :)
8/16/2005 c1 10tyro green horn
I can think of at least a dozen people fitting that description. Vanity is such a hollow thing, sometimes I really don't understand these kind of people... Molded into a thing of seemingly complete perfection and yet so broken and empty inside...
~ any way great poem, and tnx for reviewing my work I really appreciate it! hope you'd be interested enough to read a few more hehe
10tyro green hornI can think of at least a dozen people fitting that description. Vanity is such a hollow thing, sometimes I really don't understand these kind of people... Molded into a thing of seemingly complete perfection and yet so broken and empty inside...
~ any way great poem, and tnx for reviewing my work I really appreciate it! hope you'd be interested enough to read a few more hehe
7/29/2005 c1 7peekaboobunnyluvr101
wow! that kinda makes me think of someone...i guess we all know someone like that...really good though!
7peekaboobunnyluvr101wow! that kinda makes me think of someone...i guess we all know someone like that...really good though!
7/3/2005 c1 53diesoz
very nice. I like how one could make it into a real persona nd not a mannequin. I don't know if that's how you meant it, but it's really cool.
53diesozvery nice. I like how one could make it into a real persona nd not a mannequin. I don't know if that's how you meant it, but it's really cool.
7/2/2005 c1 63lackluster
lovely images, great discriptions and just mesmerizing. great poem!
~tuesday
63lacklusterlovely images, great discriptions and just mesmerizing. great poem!
~tuesday
6/29/2005 c1 38CarpeDiem28
Wow...you are the first person i know who could come up with such a poem about a manequin...
It's great.
38CarpeDiem28Wow...you are the first person i know who could come up with such a poem about a manequin...
It's great.
6/28/2005 c1 298Moon-Chaser
Wonderful, I love the last stanza. You have a gift for writing. The persona seems almost real until the last few lines.
Keep it up.
Thanks for reviewing.
298Moon-ChaserWonderful, I love the last stanza. You have a gift for writing. The persona seems almost real until the last few lines.
Keep it up.
Thanks for reviewing.
6/28/2005 c1 59Calliope Foster
Gosh. I didn't know someone could make such a great poem on a store model. LOL. I like it.
59Calliope FosterGosh. I didn't know someone could make such a great poem on a store model. LOL. I like it.
6/27/2005 c1 11les petits bateaux
Very deep and calming piece in a way, it was beautiful. I really like the way you describe the mannequin, it brings out her features. Great job!Oh and thanks for reviewing my piece, I really appreciate it.:)
~~Trinity
11les petits bateauxVery deep and calming piece in a way, it was beautiful. I really like the way you describe the mannequin, it brings out her features. Great job!Oh and thanks for reviewing my piece, I really appreciate it.:)
~~Trinity