9/16/2005 c1 26Siriusly James
At the beginning I found myself smiling, as I didn't read about any two girls - in my head, this was told by the girl I love, and it fitted so amazingly, as if written just for us.
And that's why I almost cried as I got closer to the end, that's why I burst out "No!" when she found me - her, I mean - in the bed.
So fantastically written, it was exactly the pearl I was hoping to find here when I logged on today.
The part in italics at the end is also very beautiful, and I can't say which parts of this poem I liked the best.
You touched me deeply with this, and it's going directly to my Favorites List.
At the beginning I found myself smiling, as I didn't read about any two girls - in my head, this was told by the girl I love, and it fitted so amazingly, as if written just for us.
And that's why I almost cried as I got closer to the end, that's why I burst out "No!" when she found me - her, I mean - in the bed.
So fantastically written, it was exactly the pearl I was hoping to find here when I logged on today.
The part in italics at the end is also very beautiful, and I can't say which parts of this poem I liked the best.
You touched me deeply with this, and it's going directly to my Favorites List.
6/16/2005 c1 14Grape
Wow! I really like this poem! The emotions in it are amazing, and its true, many people feel that way and make others so miserable that they wish to die. Its a great poem, and it rhyms well! Great job!
Wow! I really like this poem! The emotions in it are amazing, and its true, many people feel that way and make others so miserable that they wish to die. Its a great poem, and it rhyms well! Great job!
6/11/2005 c1 2W3DNESDAY
wow.. the rhyme scheme was perfect. it's hard to believe that you managed to write so much and have it be so poignant all while maintaining your rhyme structure. *adds to favorites*
you're so super talented.. i'm in awe.. *bows and grovels*
wow.. the rhyme scheme was perfect. it's hard to believe that you managed to write so much and have it be so poignant all while maintaining your rhyme structure. *adds to favorites*
you're so super talented.. i'm in awe.. *bows and grovels*
4/24/2005 c1 IarannCros
MJ... that... was... awesome. DON'T DEGRADE YOUR POEMS WHILE TALKING TO ME EVER AGAIN OR I WILL PERSONALLY DISEMBOWEL YOU. Okay, I won't. Disembowelment isn't my style. Maybe... decapitate? I think I'll ponder this elsewhere...
MJ... that... was... awesome. DON'T DEGRADE YOUR POEMS WHILE TALKING TO ME EVER AGAIN OR I WILL PERSONALLY DISEMBOWEL YOU. Okay, I won't. Disembowelment isn't my style. Maybe... decapitate? I think I'll ponder this elsewhere...
4/22/2005 c1 336angel4soul
Outstanding poem...so tragic so remarkably so real so sad so...amazing...excellent job... ~angel4soul~
Outstanding poem...so tragic so remarkably so real so sad so...amazing...excellent job... ~angel4soul~
4/21/2005 c1 16TerraFall
Wow. That's like the only word i can think of becuase I'm dead asleep. How can you describe this, this, this confession of tragedy, of love, of how evil society can be. It's sad, but it's beatiful.
Wow. That's like the only word i can think of becuase I'm dead asleep. How can you describe this, this, this confession of tragedy, of love, of how evil society can be. It's sad, but it's beatiful.
4/21/2005 c1 WarriorHeart
Excellent writing! The rhyming and flow were flawless. The whole thing blew me away. Keep up the great work!
Excellent writing! The rhyming and flow were flawless. The whole thing blew me away. Keep up the great work!
4/21/2005 c1 39The Aud One
this poem is so sad. i actually cried, it takes a lot to make me cry. its writen very well.
this poem is so sad. i actually cried, it takes a lot to make me cry. its writen very well.