for Quid Pro Quo2/28/2012 c25 Takemeaway
Honestly I don't really like this story. It has some good qualities, but it also has a lot of bad ones.
First, Nora's kind of a Mary sue. I haven't really seen a genuine personality for her. Also your story is really jumpy. It doesn't really have a solid plot. You jump from one thing to the next and then act as if the last thing never happened.
You have potential to be a good writer but this story just isn't working.
Honestly I don't really like this story. It has some good qualities, but it also has a lot of bad ones.
First, Nora's kind of a Mary sue. I haven't really seen a genuine personality for her. Also your story is really jumpy. It doesn't really have a solid plot. You jump from one thing to the next and then act as if the last thing never happened.
You have potential to be a good writer but this story just isn't working.
10/10/2011 c25 
8DorkExpress
Who does she love! Randy? And why the hell is Gidion being all moody and PMSing on her? Is it because he feels guilty?
XOXO
8DorkExpressWho does she love! Randy? And why the hell is Gidion being all moody and PMSing on her? Is it because he feels guilty?
XOXO
2/14/2011 c25 6 years is a long time
Wow, you haven't updated in a while. I really like this story. You should keep writing.
Wow, you haven't updated in a while. I really like this story. You should keep writing.
2/14/2011 c3 About your cat
Ah...this is kinda awkward but the cat, it's named Aryan. Like Hilter likes the Aryan race kinda name...so...uh yeah
Ah...this is kinda awkward but the cat, it's named Aryan. Like Hilter likes the Aryan race kinda name...so...uh yeah
10/21/2009 c25 7Liya Smith
pretty.
i liked this. a lot. ugh. there's an overpopulation of lady bugs (or asian ladybird beetles?) where i live and now i'm paranoid that they're in my room. yeah.
7Liya Smithpretty.
i liked this. a lot. ugh. there's an overpopulation of lady bugs (or asian ladybird beetles?) where i live and now i'm paranoid that they're in my room. yeah.
6/27/2009 c25 Kimberly Beckwith
Wow its really good i hope to read more to see who she will be with!
Wow its really good i hope to read more to see who she will be with!
12/7/2007 c7 pete's sake delete the account
Hey! I like the story so far, but one question: Wasn't Gideon supposed to have a nonnegotiable swim meet during this chapter?
Hey! I like the story so far, but one question: Wasn't Gideon supposed to have a nonnegotiable swim meet during this chapter?
8/5/2007 c25 1Dragonette12
hi
i luv ur story! and i kno the last time you updated was 2 years ago...so if u get this message, if u feel like it that is, could u finish the storie? i would be really happy if u wud ^^ and if u don't thats kewl i mean u prob can't b bothered finishing it neways...so yea i luv ur writing style by the way :)
1Dragonette12hi
i luv ur story! and i kno the last time you updated was 2 years ago...so if u get this message, if u feel like it that is, could u finish the storie? i would be really happy if u wud ^^ and if u don't thats kewl i mean u prob can't b bothered finishing it neways...so yea i luv ur writing style by the way :)
5/18/2007 c3 Rikayla
LOLOL! This cracked me up: "The parlor. This house has a parlor. I thought those were extinct along with the dinosaurs and the red phone booths of England."
You've got a great sense of humour and this looks like it'll be with a great plot and some great characters too. :D *thumbs up*
LOLOL! This cracked me up: "The parlor. This house has a parlor. I thought those were extinct along with the dinosaurs and the red phone booths of England."
You've got a great sense of humour and this looks like it'll be with a great plot and some great characters too. :D *thumbs up*
1/28/2007 c25 3pleasebequiet
man... gid's her 4th cousin? it would be much better if randy was. doesnt it sound weird that you kissed your 4th cousin? UPDATE soon!
3pleasebequietman... gid's her 4th cousin? it would be much better if randy was. doesnt it sound weird that you kissed your 4th cousin? UPDATE soon!
11/26/2006 c25 Mikey
Ohmygod, ohmygod, the plot THICKENS! It's like some...thing that thickens! Like BUTTER! Or something..
Anyways, how could Gideon be so cold? What's his damage? PMS? Aha, just kidding.
Lovely story. Truly.
Ohmygod, ohmygod, the plot THICKENS! It's like some...thing that thickens! Like BUTTER! Or something..
Anyways, how could Gideon be so cold? What's his damage? PMS? Aha, just kidding.
Lovely story. Truly.