for That Rose You Dropped9/13/2005 c1 Amelia Grant
it sounds good...could be a song, but I can't think of a tune to compare it to. anyway, great job. I don't think I have anything to suggest, just keep it up!
it sounds good...could be a song, but I can't think of a tune to compare it to. anyway, great job. I don't think I have anything to suggest, just keep it up!
4/26/2005 c1 
105fragglerock
Wow! I like this a lot; it reminds me of what happened with my best guy friend and me, only it didn't involve a rose. :)My favorite line: "Anonymous rose he left in her way."Also, I don't know how the tune is supposed to go, or if there is a tune, but I can't quite get the rhyming scheme and it might help to drop a few words here and there, but that's just my suggestion. :P
105fragglerockWow! I like this a lot; it reminds me of what happened with my best guy friend and me, only it didn't involve a rose. :)My favorite line: "Anonymous rose he left in her way."Also, I don't know how the tune is supposed to go, or if there is a tune, but I can't quite get the rhyming scheme and it might help to drop a few words here and there, but that's just my suggestion. :P
4/26/2005 c1 31Ecryptic
I actually think it good as it is. A great meaning that I could relate to and well-written. The only error that I saw was already discussed by the first reviewer but IMO I think you should just say "he suffered from the inside out" instead of adding but he or and he.
31EcrypticI actually think it good as it is. A great meaning that I could relate to and well-written. The only error that I saw was already discussed by the first reviewer but IMO I think you should just say "he suffered from the inside out" instead of adding but he or and he.
4/26/2005 c1 Ahemait
its would work perfectly for a song. it was really strong poem with tons of good feelings. the style you used throughout it was original and brilliant. the content of the poem/song was also very good. the ending was great. error, though: Buy he suffered from the inside out' that 'buy' should be somethign else. like 'but' or...something. -shrug- oh well, very nicely done, nevertheless
its would work perfectly for a song. it was really strong poem with tons of good feelings. the style you used throughout it was original and brilliant. the content of the poem/song was also very good. the ending was great. error, though: Buy he suffered from the inside out' that 'buy' should be somethign else. like 'but' or...something. -shrug- oh well, very nicely done, nevertheless