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4/27/2005 c1 Juan
m... yeh i can really see where your coming from. you are truly becoming a budding poet!can u write a poem about the different personalities or people inside your head perhaps that is an idea for your next poem... but i dont want to cramp your style. WOOT LEET HOXOR!
4/27/2005 c1 Rattana
My grandpa said's it's very clever. Very imaginetive and original. Nicely put together and he would never have thought u were 14.
4/27/2005 c1 Tom
INDEED another masterpiece. I can only praise your latest work. My favourite lines are 'What are you thinking?/ I can feel you near/ Two parallel lines that/ Never meet'

The sussness is GLARINGLY OBVIOUS though. I'm sure you've intended it to be subtle but I think the lines 'building to a climax/ about to erupt' is RANDOM and not doing any good to your song, so CHANGE it! PLEASE! But apart from that one moment of weakness. Its a super good song!

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