for Ramar9/6/2007 c1 
64Phi-Dono
you are with the awesome. i think this is my favorite piece of yours, and second has to be "trickle". i wish i had the power to create such astounding works of literature with so few words as you do. you should seriously consider getting these published. i know i would buy the book, for sure.
64Phi-Donoyou are with the awesome. i think this is my favorite piece of yours, and second has to be "trickle". i wish i had the power to create such astounding works of literature with so few words as you do. you should seriously consider getting these published. i know i would buy the book, for sure.
1/1/2006 c1 136Elliptical Shapes
I like this one.
I'm not going to say it's excellent because I don't think it is, but I like it.
Just thought you could have used something different than 'I need' to start off the third line.
Alan
136Elliptical ShapesI like this one.
I'm not going to say it's excellent because I don't think it is, but I like it.
Just thought you could have used something different than 'I need' to start off the third line.
Alan
6/24/2005 c1 23WickedSilence
Despite the fact that this poem is about growing wings (which usually has a positive connotation associated with it) I found myself inexplicably saddened when I read the last line. I liked how there was a parallel between growth and "opening." Line 3 had two meanings to me: literal, gruesome opening apart of one's shoulder blades and opening in the sense of a flower blossoming. Short, but full of meaning. Keep up the good work.
23WickedSilenceDespite the fact that this poem is about growing wings (which usually has a positive connotation associated with it) I found myself inexplicably saddened when I read the last line. I liked how there was a parallel between growth and "opening." Line 3 had two meanings to me: literal, gruesome opening apart of one's shoulder blades and opening in the sense of a flower blossoming. Short, but full of meaning. Keep up the good work.
5/2/2005 c1 42officialmuse
wow nice its so short and simple but thats what makes is so good.. thanks for reviewing my poem the riddle one. I never thought about it that way but yeah.. when i wrote it, i was thinking about a certain someone that really had me confused... therefore there was something missing something that needed to come out. but now that i think of it ilike it better now u put it :-D~*~Ana~*~
42officialmusewow nice its so short and simple but thats what makes is so good.. thanks for reviewing my poem the riddle one. I never thought about it that way but yeah.. when i wrote it, i was thinking about a certain someone that really had me confused... therefore there was something missing something that needed to come out. but now that i think of it ilike it better now u put it :-D~*~Ana~*~