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5/3/2005 c1 83Nails For Your Crucifix
Pretty good idea, but I think this would be better as a short fictional piece. (Then again, that's just my opinion). Too many similar pronouns also. Next time you think about using 2 male characters you talk about one after another, consider making it first person.

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