for Now Disappear5/9/2005 c1 addie pray
Hmm. I really liked the main ryhmes in this, but the repetition is killing me. I love the imagery and idea behind "forgive me the ropes and sell me your ear", but I think this needs more original parts like that. I also liked curves/words, very flowing and awesome. Not too sure about the huge focus on 'rears'...as I said before, I suggest you add more original parts to this. Overall, this is good. I like it, and thanks for reviewing mine - it's true about my older stuff...I might start to take them down, I'm ashamed. (bows head)
Hmm. I really liked the main ryhmes in this, but the repetition is killing me. I love the imagery and idea behind "forgive me the ropes and sell me your ear", but I think this needs more original parts like that. I also liked curves/words, very flowing and awesome. Not too sure about the huge focus on 'rears'...as I said before, I suggest you add more original parts to this. Overall, this is good. I like it, and thanks for reviewing mine - it's true about my older stuff...I might start to take them down, I'm ashamed. (bows head)
5/7/2005 c1 
26BestSkeptic
Rarely do I read a well-written rhyming poem on fictionpress. (About one a week) Thanks a lot, now I have to wait another week.
(... and if you're not one for saracasm, that translates to "well done.")
26BestSkepticRarely do I read a well-written rhyming poem on fictionpress. (About one a week) Thanks a lot, now I have to wait another week.
(... and if you're not one for saracasm, that translates to "well done.")