for HalfEmpty Cup6/2/2005 c1 
11breaker-one
Really, really nice piece. The dialogue was well written and flowed nicely (not forced or anything) and all the characters seemed like people you'd actually meet on a bus. :) I enjoyed this story, but then again, I like everything you write.
11breaker-oneReally, really nice piece. The dialogue was well written and flowed nicely (not forced or anything) and all the characters seemed like people you'd actually meet on a bus. :) I enjoyed this story, but then again, I like everything you write.
5/22/2005 c1 shi-neko
nice, nice. i could really feel wilson's left-out-ness in the bus, and his confusion later on. very well done, and the ending is very good. great job!
nice, nice. i could really feel wilson's left-out-ness in the bus, and his confusion later on. very well done, and the ending is very good. great job!
5/11/2005 c1 Steven
Andrew this is great stuff, really. Reads like O. Henry, only you're in high school. Incredible.
Andrew this is great stuff, really. Reads like O. Henry, only you're in high school. Incredible.