for Southern Summer5/12/2005 c1 reimeiki
this poem is definetly wacky but makes you think of a summer day that is hot and icky and the duck was and interesting part of the poem, clevery use of rhyming also ^^! overall I like it
this poem is definetly wacky but makes you think of a summer day that is hot and icky and the duck was and interesting part of the poem, clevery use of rhyming also ^^! overall I like it
5/12/2005 c1 
86Cheesy Brussle Sprouts
The author misspelled "I'll," and I think the author meant to use the word "lay" instead of "laid." Other than that, the poem reminds me of Faulkner in that it draws the reader along a hazy path from one point to another. Nice rhyming.
86Cheesy Brussle SproutsThe author misspelled "I'll," and I think the author meant to use the word "lay" instead of "laid." Other than that, the poem reminds me of Faulkner in that it draws the reader along a hazy path from one point to another. Nice rhyming.
5/12/2005 c1 6scarlet sunrise
haha that was great. "everything went spotty then the duck went potty." pretty unique. keep writing!
6scarlet sunrisehaha that was great. "everything went spotty then the duck went potty." pretty unique. keep writing!