for In Good Time6/13/2006 c1 
32eldrin
Loved the dialogue, though some of the filler was less than perfect. Entertaining throughout.
32eldrinLoved the dialogue, though some of the filler was less than perfect. Entertaining throughout.
4/12/2006 c1 maddy
that was a ok story you have to write more though
that was a ok story you have to write more though
6/10/2005 c1 26pneumothorax
I love it. It's intelligent and interesting. '“Twenty-one. You’re thirteen, right?” The corner of my mouth quirked up in the slightest of smirks.' made me smile. Brilliant line. Keep writing, please?
26pneumothoraxI love it. It's intelligent and interesting. '“Twenty-one. You’re thirteen, right?” The corner of my mouth quirked up in the slightest of smirks.' made me smile. Brilliant line. Keep writing, please?
5/25/2005 c1 2A Boy Flower
I hate you. Tristan was SO my name. ::shoots you::Anyway, I like Tristan. He made me laugh, countless times... though it could have just been that I'm an idiot.Anyway, hurry up with chapter two, as now I'm very suspicious on what shall happen next.
2A Boy FlowerI hate you. Tristan was SO my name. ::shoots you::Anyway, I like Tristan. He made me laugh, countless times... though it could have just been that I'm an idiot.Anyway, hurry up with chapter two, as now I'm very suspicious on what shall happen next.
5/22/2005 c1 Damian E L
I was thinking about this the other day and decided I really like it. I hope you update soon.
I was thinking about this the other day and decided I really like it. I hope you update soon.
5/15/2005 c1 Blutiger Tod
Good potential. Sorry my sentences are shot. My throat is dry and I'm in need of rest. On that note, I am going to bed. And update soon. Sorry for loading all this useless crap on you. TOODLES!
Good potential. Sorry my sentences are shot. My throat is dry and I'm in need of rest. On that note, I am going to bed. And update soon. Sorry for loading all this useless crap on you. TOODLES!
5/14/2005 c1 1Unknown Entity
Oh this is an interesting concept. I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes.
1Unknown EntityOh this is an interesting concept. I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes.
5/14/2005 c1 96Liebe Sasa
I'm curious. Thanks Tay, now I'm going to be wondering about this all weekend.
The first paragraph is rather awkward, but I like the rest. The personalities of the characters are really well done, without being disgustingly overbearing.
~Sasa
96Liebe SasaI'm curious. Thanks Tay, now I'm going to be wondering about this all weekend.
The first paragraph is rather awkward, but I like the rest. The personalities of the characters are really well done, without being disgustingly overbearing.
~Sasa
5/13/2005 c1 ddz008
Great chapter!I liked the story!Tristan is great, so direct and everything XDI hope he doesn't means any harm to Richard... they'll be cute together.Keep writing, please!Hope to see the next chapter pretty soon!:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
Great chapter!I liked the story!Tristan is great, so direct and everything XDI hope he doesn't means any harm to Richard... they'll be cute together.Keep writing, please!Hope to see the next chapter pretty soon!:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
5/13/2005 c1 M L
lol. I really like this. It would suck to find out it's a bet. Or maybe not, I don't know. Write more.
lol. I really like this. It would suck to find out it's a bet. Or maybe not, I don't know. Write more.
5/13/2005 c1 StarDust Rocker
This is pretty good. I really like. update soon! hmm...i can't think of any cristisicms soi'l just tell you this UPDATE REALLY SOON! ok buh-bye now
This is pretty good. I really like. update soon! hmm...i can't think of any cristisicms soi'l just tell you this UPDATE REALLY SOON! ok buh-bye now
5/12/2005 c1 Kieran Wolfe
I feel so special... reviewing before anyone else... But anyway, this seems interesting enough to read on... so I do hope that you'll continue. I read your bio and it turns out your 21. *sigh* I am younger... oh well... you're hot all the same... *drool* JK. Please continue.
I feel so special... reviewing before anyone else... But anyway, this seems interesting enough to read on... so I do hope that you'll continue. I read your bio and it turns out your 21. *sigh* I am younger... oh well... you're hot all the same... *drool* JK. Please continue.