for Do You Hear It?9/15/2005 c1 
5RedHairedWriter
so many listen but don't hear... A beautiful tragic, thought through poem... If anyone wants war after that... well... brilliant
5RedHairedWriterso many listen but don't hear... A beautiful tragic, thought through poem... If anyone wants war after that... well... brilliant
7/24/2005 c1 Manju
woah. i love the first verse most. u should try more poetry. this one's good enough. if u do need help, don't hesitate to ask. oh and pls check out some of my work. i'd really appreciate it.
woah. i love the first verse most. u should try more poetry. this one's good enough. if u do need help, don't hesitate to ask. oh and pls check out some of my work. i'd really appreciate it.
6/19/2005 c1 SonheDeusa
I really liked the way you put this together. You brought forth the imagery of a kid experiencing the pain of fighting parents in each stanza (at least as I read it). Keep writing!
I really liked the way you put this together. You brought forth the imagery of a kid experiencing the pain of fighting parents in each stanza (at least as I read it). Keep writing!
5/17/2005 c1 12eighteen hundred
It was alright, might've been more effective if you'd had more, but thats just my opinion.
12eighteen hundredIt was alright, might've been more effective if you'd had more, but thats just my opinion.
5/17/2005 c1 74laughter at the funeral
the repetition format really works for this one...it somehow evokes a somewhat of social awareness air to me...good job here...oh and pls..if you have the time...pls do review some of my poem..thanks...
truly yours...
74laughter at the funeralthe repetition format really works for this one...it somehow evokes a somewhat of social awareness air to me...good job here...oh and pls..if you have the time...pls do review some of my poem..thanks...
truly yours...