for The Unicorn4/6/2006 c1 
64Arwen Starfire
beautiful...mythical...dreamy...a beautiful tribute to a beatiful creature (but are you so sure they are gone? *smiles*)
64Arwen Starfirebeautiful...mythical...dreamy...a beautiful tribute to a beatiful creature (but are you so sure they are gone? *smiles*)
1/7/2006 c1 The Moon Child
*wipes tears from my eyes* That was a truly beautiful piece. The description, the memories, it was all perfectly done.
Instant Fave.
*wipes tears from my eyes* That was a truly beautiful piece. The description, the memories, it was all perfectly done.
Instant Fave.
11/28/2005 c1 17Kinna
This is a wonderful story. The beautiful imagery and descriptions held me captive till the end. As I read the words they lulled me into a sort of calm, relaxed, daydreaming state, kinda similar to what the person in the story would feel I guess. The last sentence was great ending.
Also, thank you for reviewing my poem, I appreciated your comments.
17KinnaThis is a wonderful story. The beautiful imagery and descriptions held me captive till the end. As I read the words they lulled me into a sort of calm, relaxed, daydreaming state, kinda similar to what the person in the story would feel I guess. The last sentence was great ending.
Also, thank you for reviewing my poem, I appreciated your comments.
9/30/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Absolutely beautiful. Your descriptions are just enchanting, and serene. I especially liked the last line. It was on the verge of being too wordy but had a lovely old-English feel to it.
The only cc I have is occasionally, you use a comma where a semicolon would be better. For instance, "Some say that unicorns only come to those who are virgin, I would not be able to prove that theory wrong." Both are independant clauses, so they should be seperated by a semicolon. That was the only grammatical error I found, however.
I've always been fascinated by the myth that only a virgin can tame a unicorn. I actually wrote a story myself with that theme ("Talitha"). I never felt I quite captured the idea...not as well as you have here, at any rate.
This is going straight to my favorites list. Keep writing!
20Pheobe MeryllAbsolutely beautiful. Your descriptions are just enchanting, and serene. I especially liked the last line. It was on the verge of being too wordy but had a lovely old-English feel to it.
The only cc I have is occasionally, you use a comma where a semicolon would be better. For instance, "Some say that unicorns only come to those who are virgin, I would not be able to prove that theory wrong." Both are independant clauses, so they should be seperated by a semicolon. That was the only grammatical error I found, however.
I've always been fascinated by the myth that only a virgin can tame a unicorn. I actually wrote a story myself with that theme ("Talitha"). I never felt I quite captured the idea...not as well as you have here, at any rate.
This is going straight to my favorites list. Keep writing!
5/23/2005 c1 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Hi there! Sorry to miss out on your stories for so long... Anyway, good to see that you've decided to come up with a new story... Good showing of the overall atmosphere and I really like the way that the unicorn is portrayed and how it relayed what it had really gone through... good introduction of showing what is possible in the future even though I may not know... Now I'm really looking forward to see what will come out of this story and I believe that you'll not disappoint me or all other readers... btw, just wondering... are you gonna include a ranger in this story in the future?
P.S: Just in case you don't know... I've updated COA for quite some time now... hope to receive your review very soon...
13Tsumujikaze no SoujutsuHi there! Sorry to miss out on your stories for so long... Anyway, good to see that you've decided to come up with a new story... Good showing of the overall atmosphere and I really like the way that the unicorn is portrayed and how it relayed what it had really gone through... good introduction of showing what is possible in the future even though I may not know... Now I'm really looking forward to see what will come out of this story and I believe that you'll not disappoint me or all other readers... btw, just wondering... are you gonna include a ranger in this story in the future?
P.S: Just in case you don't know... I've updated COA for quite some time now... hope to receive your review very soon...