
2/16/2006 c17 hollykesten
i like the story, keep up the good work, get Kian and Mary out! and dont hurt the others...
More Soon
i like the story, keep up the good work, get Kian and Mary out! and dont hurt the others...
More Soon
10/28/2005 c16
3GaelynX
Wow...I knew it! So that's why she's so important, and dangerous. Can't wait for the next chapter(oh, and good luck with that writer's block. I'm still trying to get through mine.)

Wow...I knew it! So that's why she's so important, and dangerous. Can't wait for the next chapter(oh, and good luck with that writer's block. I'm still trying to get through mine.)
9/17/2005 c11 ScjT
Love it... update soon pls..
Love it... update soon pls..
9/17/2005 c11 GaelynX
You need to specify who is speaking and when one person stops and another begins.
You need to specify who is speaking and when one person stops and another begins.
9/5/2005 c8
12Flamevixen
Boy, this is sorta confusing. So many new character names to remember... What's Tamara's problem with Marianna? Good chapter!

Boy, this is sorta confusing. So many new character names to remember... What's Tamara's problem with Marianna? Good chapter!
9/5/2005 c7 Flamevixen
Good chapter! Sounds like Archimedes doesn't care who he kills as long as he gets a vampire. What a creep. Good chapter!
Good chapter! Sounds like Archimedes doesn't care who he kills as long as he gets a vampire. What a creep. Good chapter!
9/5/2005 c5 Flamevixen
Why is Marianna's dad so mean? Something tells me that Kian will get involed with Marianna eventually. They have a great atraction to each other. I've got a bad feeling about this Mathen dude. Well, I guess I was right on Matthen. What a jackass he is. Why did Marianna deepen the kiss? Good chapter!
Why is Marianna's dad so mean? Something tells me that Kian will get involed with Marianna eventually. They have a great atraction to each other. I've got a bad feeling about this Mathen dude. Well, I guess I was right on Matthen. What a jackass he is. Why did Marianna deepen the kiss? Good chapter!
8/20/2005 c10
3GaelynX
There were some mispellings but nothing major. Great job! I'm looking forward to the next chapter=)

There were some mispellings but nothing major. Great job! I'm looking forward to the next chapter=)
8/17/2005 c9 ScjT
Love it.. update soon pls..
Love it.. update soon pls..
8/17/2005 c1
80Korashio
Hmm, I like what you have so far,but that's not it right? Anyways good job I love a good vampire story. If you want you can check out mine its called Crystal Soul its not about vampires but i think its pretty good

Hmm, I like what you have so far,but that's not it right? Anyways good job I love a good vampire story. If you want you can check out mine its called Crystal Soul its not about vampires but i think its pretty good
8/9/2005 c8
3GaelynX
I thooughly enjoyed it! There were some spelling mistakes and you were missing some words in your sentences, but other than that it was pretty well done. Keep up the good work! =)

I thooughly enjoyed it! There were some spelling mistakes and you were missing some words in your sentences, but other than that it was pretty well done. Keep up the good work! =)
8/9/2005 c8 sillylittle-emokid
YAY!...i like it because your misspellings arn't like all hecka crazy and out there..your story is easy to understand if you really want to understand it...YAYhm yehalots of chaotic love,chaos
YAY!...i like it because your misspellings arn't like all hecka crazy and out there..your story is easy to understand if you really want to understand it...YAYhm yehalots of chaotic love,chaos