for Nothing Doing7/19/2006 c1 
12Kurt Wagner
Perfect.
I wear a school uniform, where stupid kilts are mandatory.
Just perfect.
12Kurt WagnerPerfect.
I wear a school uniform, where stupid kilts are mandatory.
Just perfect.
5/22/2006 c1 27Electra Fairford
kawaii! I like the verbing of Marilyn Monroe; the effect is excellent and the poem overall is wry and cute.
Criticisms: you as the poet ought to know whether the sky is blue or grey; the first two lines feel uncertain. There are a few rhythm issues also...actually I have an issue with each of the three apostrophes in the poem-the first for grammar and the latter two for rhythm.
Very good overall...I like this poem.
27Electra Fairfordkawaii! I like the verbing of Marilyn Monroe; the effect is excellent and the poem overall is wry and cute.
Criticisms: you as the poet ought to know whether the sky is blue or grey; the first two lines feel uncertain. There are a few rhythm issues also...actually I have an issue with each of the three apostrophes in the poem-the first for grammar and the latter two for rhythm.
Very good overall...I like this poem.
1/26/2006 c1 nineprodigies
HILARIOUS! XD And I read your other stories too but since there so much i loved, I was too lazy to review all but since this is my fav one, I'm reviewin this one!
HILARIOUS! XD And I read your other stories too but since there so much i loved, I was too lazy to review all but since this is my fav one, I'm reviewin this one!
6/4/2005 c1 36Amrun
Hahahahahahah. That made me laugh. The one thing I didn't like is the rhyme-word "blowing" being repeated.
36AmrunHahahahahahah. That made me laugh. The one thing I didn't like is the rhyme-word "blowing" being repeated.
6/4/2005 c1 85grim-dreamer
...This is becoming a tradmark of yours, isn't it, the monotone rhyme structure - not at all a bad thing. You've got a clumsy sense of humour. (And no, luv, I am not insulting you...)
85grim-dreamer...This is becoming a tradmark of yours, isn't it, the monotone rhyme structure - not at all a bad thing. You've got a clumsy sense of humour. (And no, luv, I am not insulting you...)
5/28/2005 c1 kel under the couch
lol that was awesome.i especially liked "Marilyn Monroe-ing"
btw, my poem with the cat is directed at some family member. i'm not sure who yet, since it's a combination of a few of them.
lol that was awesome.i especially liked "Marilyn Monroe-ing"
btw, my poem with the cat is directed at some family member. i'm not sure who yet, since it's a combination of a few of them.
5/24/2005 c1 14In Search of Sunrise
LOL...i don't wear a skirt...well..cuz i'm a guy but anyways this is pretty funy hahaha...ya nice ryhmes..lol
ps thanks for the review too lol
~DW
14In Search of SunriseLOL...i don't wear a skirt...well..cuz i'm a guy but anyways this is pretty funy hahaha...ya nice ryhmes..lol
ps thanks for the review too lol
~DW
5/24/2005 c1 F.R. Southerland
Funny. I liked the last few lines, about the Marilyn Monroe-ing skirt and the underwear showing. Lol. Good job with this one. Take care, keep writing, and thank you for reviewing my poem.
Funny. I liked the last few lines, about the Marilyn Monroe-ing skirt and the underwear showing. Lol. Good job with this one. Take care, keep writing, and thank you for reviewing my poem.