for Walking6/14/2005 c1 
150SpawnMeister666
I like this a lot, and at the same time I don't like it at all. Who is the narrator? What's going on between the couple that one moment they appear so in love and the next they're fighting to the death?
The pace of the tale is perfect, and the tale itself is both dark and chilling, despite it's light and breezy outset. There are too many questions left unanswered though, and this is why I dislike it almost as much as I love it.
If that makes any sense!
Spawny
150SpawnMeister666I like this a lot, and at the same time I don't like it at all. Who is the narrator? What's going on between the couple that one moment they appear so in love and the next they're fighting to the death?
The pace of the tale is perfect, and the tale itself is both dark and chilling, despite it's light and breezy outset. There are too many questions left unanswered though, and this is why I dislike it almost as much as I love it.
If that makes any sense!
Spawny
6/2/2005 c1 Demus
Whoa. Cool. Very very cool. Especially considering the time limit. Go judo woman! I like it. The use of a bystander to tell the story is awesome- like dramatic monolgoue from outside a situation.
Whoa. Cool. Very very cool. Especially considering the time limit. Go judo woman! I like it. The use of a bystander to tell the story is awesome- like dramatic monolgoue from outside a situation.
5/25/2005 c1 Jade Arikawa
Very good. Considering the time limit, extraordianry. I really hadn't expected the ending, especially what the girl says. It suprises me that she has killed before. Keep up the good work. How about another challenge for you? I'll give you TWO hours. Or as long as you like, take your pick. Themes have to be self sacrifice,discovering truth, and remembering your past. It can take place anytime, anywhere. The last thing any of the characters can say is this: "May luck be always be at your side, death stray far from your door, and may your scars never fade." Best of luck!
Jade
Very good. Considering the time limit, extraordianry. I really hadn't expected the ending, especially what the girl says. It suprises me that she has killed before. Keep up the good work. How about another challenge for you? I'll give you TWO hours. Or as long as you like, take your pick. Themes have to be self sacrifice,discovering truth, and remembering your past. It can take place anytime, anywhere. The last thing any of the characters can say is this: "May luck be always be at your side, death stray far from your door, and may your scars never fade." Best of luck!
Jade
5/24/2005 c1 Katabatic
Bravo! Chilling, abstract and excellent. Challenge completed!
Bravo! Chilling, abstract and excellent. Challenge completed!