for The War of Time I: The Beginning12/29/2004 c1 
2raingurlsofia
That was awesome! It was interesting, up till the end, where I was totally confused. You used only one sentence to show that Zeus and Ares were fighting. You got the element of surprise like you wanted, but it was just too quick for me to put a finger on it and grasp the whole idea. Cool! Are you going to have another chapter?
2raingurlsofiaThat was awesome! It was interesting, up till the end, where I was totally confused. You used only one sentence to show that Zeus and Ares were fighting. You got the element of surprise like you wanted, but it was just too quick for me to put a finger on it and grasp the whole idea. Cool! Are you going to have another chapter?
1/18/2002 c1 25faery tragedy
Very nice. However, you could add a few more details around a few spots. Otherwise, it was great.
25faery tragedyVery nice. However, you could add a few more details around a few spots. Otherwise, it was great.
5/11/2000 c1 TheBlueImp
Not bad Jeff, although it feels as though your being rushed through the story.
Spend time with it and add details about the people and places.
Not bad Jeff, although it feels as though your being rushed through the story.
Spend time with it and add details about the people and places.
4/28/2000 c1 Lord Marcus
Interesting look at the reason behind the fall of the Greek Gods as deities. Written quite well; however, it lacks a clear explanation of Ares' later actions in assaulting Zeus.
Interesting look at the reason behind the fall of the Greek Gods as deities. Written quite well; however, it lacks a clear explanation of Ares' later actions in assaulting Zeus.
4/25/2000 c1 Adam Jammoe
Good story. Original. Neat. Nice...write more of it. Need more.
Good story. Original. Neat. Nice...write more of it. Need more.