for Brett & Michael8/13/2005 c10 Emily
You are a brilliant writer. There isn't anything else to say. Please update soon. I check everyday.
You are a brilliant writer. There isn't anything else to say. Please update soon. I check everyday.
8/9/2005 c10 
1samalane
Excellant. you didn't really get to see this side of Mike when he was woth Victor.
And it seems as though brett has softend up quite alot...hmm
I just realized. Brett and Rob(my step dad) are really quite alike. ^_^
1samalaneExcellant. you didn't really get to see this side of Mike when he was woth Victor.
And it seems as though brett has softend up quite alot...hmm
I just realized. Brett and Rob(my step dad) are really quite alike. ^_^
8/8/2005 c10 1Mak Hertz
Awesome chapter! I absolutely LOVED it. You had me laughing like an idiot. Excellent. So great! Just like everything else you write! Keep up the good work and update soon. :)
1Mak HertzAwesome chapter! I absolutely LOVED it. You had me laughing like an idiot. Excellent. So great! Just like everything else you write! Keep up the good work and update soon. :)
8/8/2005 c10 rodeoclown
Great story, seems very real. I think the reason I like this story is that its jaded and cynical and not at the same time. I like how Brett's slowly softening towards Michael, especially in this latest chapter...and sex in a tent is so...sexy. Can't wait for more. Kudos to you!
Great story, seems very real. I think the reason I like this story is that its jaded and cynical and not at the same time. I like how Brett's slowly softening towards Michael, especially in this latest chapter...and sex in a tent is so...sexy. Can't wait for more. Kudos to you!
8/8/2005 c10 25Esquirella
You know, I went into this story not knowing if I could warm to Mikey like I did in "My Lover Victor". But you do such a good job of writing him. It's like watching someone in RL, almost. I love how you make him slowly come to realizations. Like how his life can go on even though Victor's suicide was so horrific. And I love the pairing, too. I never thought I could get used to Brett without Damon, but Mikey seems to be so much more stable a match for him. More!
25EsquirellaYou know, I went into this story not knowing if I could warm to Mikey like I did in "My Lover Victor". But you do such a good job of writing him. It's like watching someone in RL, almost. I love how you make him slowly come to realizations. Like how his life can go on even though Victor's suicide was so horrific. And I love the pairing, too. I never thought I could get used to Brett without Damon, but Mikey seems to be so much more stable a match for him. More!
8/8/2005 c10 32eldrin
...Wow. This chapter was almost beyond amazing. I was surprised by how incredibly impressed I was with each word, and with each character's role in this chapter. This is opening up beautifully. I can't wait to read more about Will, and, of course, about Brett and Mike. I feel the urge to bow to your awesome writing powere.
32eldrin...Wow. This chapter was almost beyond amazing. I was surprised by how incredibly impressed I was with each word, and with each character's role in this chapter. This is opening up beautifully. I can't wait to read more about Will, and, of course, about Brett and Mike. I feel the urge to bow to your awesome writing powere.
8/7/2005 c10 69tomato-greens
Poor Will. With the mouth. Dang, I don't get how a mouth can be sexual, but whatever. Someday, someday . . . . More sex. Well, hey, that's what the down button is fore. I am so freaking immature. Oh, on that note-even though your characters swear, and swear a lot, this is one of the most natural using of cursings ever. No, really, some people don't know how to make their characters swear gracefully. They just stick in random expletives.
Predictions! Everybody loves predictions. I like predictions. WILL THEY COME TRUE?
Yay! You used blond correctly! It changes with gender, I think-blonde versus blond-and you used blond for a boy. Oh, I'm so proud, nobody ever does that. Cheers to the English language.
I still wanna know what happened to Will, though.
69tomato-greensPoor Will. With the mouth. Dang, I don't get how a mouth can be sexual, but whatever. Someday, someday . . . . More sex. Well, hey, that's what the down button is fore. I am so freaking immature. Oh, on that note-even though your characters swear, and swear a lot, this is one of the most natural using of cursings ever. No, really, some people don't know how to make their characters swear gracefully. They just stick in random expletives.
Predictions! Everybody loves predictions. I like predictions. WILL THEY COME TRUE?
Yay! You used blond correctly! It changes with gender, I think-blonde versus blond-and you used blond for a boy. Oh, I'm so proud, nobody ever does that. Cheers to the English language.
I still wanna know what happened to Will, though.
8/7/2005 c9 tomato-greens
"Is this your new gay workmate?"
Heh. Priceless, that.
Just updated! That's never happened before, very cool.
"Is this your new gay workmate?"
Heh. Priceless, that.
Just updated! That's never happened before, very cool.
8/7/2005 c3 tomato-greens
Hey. I'm back. Really. I kind of . . . went away . . . for a while . . . .
Anyway. Hi! Missed your stories, decided to come back to check, and lo and behold, a couple more have appeared. This is already better than your previous pieces in this universe (though they were by no means bad!) ; it's like your 'writing voice' has, I dunno, matured. Is that a good word? It's more realistic, like you know the characters better, which I'm sure is true, as they've all featured in at least one piece before; it flows easier.
And you didn't have them wildly have sex yet either! Practice does make perfect and doesn't have me avert my eyes and scroll down furiously! Sarcasm aside, I like the fact that they're kind of bumblingly meeting each other, all teenager-like, and that they haven't rushed into, well, anything. And I love that he keeps alluding to the 'now' of the story from the future where he's telling the story, and the hints that they're together. Well, figured that /anyway/, but-
Yeah, whatever. Come by sometime-Mackenzie was finished and is being rewritten as you read my crappy review. I'll review again at the newest chapter.
Hey. I'm back. Really. I kind of . . . went away . . . for a while . . . .
Anyway. Hi! Missed your stories, decided to come back to check, and lo and behold, a couple more have appeared. This is already better than your previous pieces in this universe (though they were by no means bad!) ; it's like your 'writing voice' has, I dunno, matured. Is that a good word? It's more realistic, like you know the characters better, which I'm sure is true, as they've all featured in at least one piece before; it flows easier.
And you didn't have them wildly have sex yet either! Practice does make perfect and doesn't have me avert my eyes and scroll down furiously! Sarcasm aside, I like the fact that they're kind of bumblingly meeting each other, all teenager-like, and that they haven't rushed into, well, anything. And I love that he keeps alluding to the 'now' of the story from the future where he's telling the story, and the hints that they're together. Well, figured that /anyway/, but-
Yeah, whatever. Come by sometime-Mackenzie was finished and is being rewritten as you read my crappy review. I'll review again at the newest chapter.
8/3/2005 c9 1samalane
lmao. It's mayham, and I love it. Excellant, though I am finding it hard to keeo track of all the people. Lol.
1samalanelmao. It's mayham, and I love it. Excellant, though I am finding it hard to keeo track of all the people. Lol.
8/2/2005 c9 4Taylor-Ame
I'm enjoying Mike's point of view a lot. Probably moreso than Damon's. Mike's jaded, yet so naive.
4Taylor-AmeI'm enjoying Mike's point of view a lot. Probably moreso than Damon's. Mike's jaded, yet so naive.
8/2/2005 c9 1Mak Hertz
Yay. Another nice story! I love everything you write, or I have so far. Update soon please. :)
1Mak HertzYay. Another nice story! I love everything you write, or I have so far. Update soon please. :)
8/2/2005 c9 25Esquirella
It really seems like the whole world (and Fate) is against poor Mikey. But I think this group camping thing will be a good way for him to see what Brett's life is really like. Dane really abuses his brother, huh? LOL! I have a little brother like that. I would beat the snot out of him if he invited himself along though. Sister's priviledge.
25EsquirellaIt really seems like the whole world (and Fate) is against poor Mikey. But I think this group camping thing will be a good way for him to see what Brett's life is really like. Dane really abuses his brother, huh? LOL! I have a little brother like that. I would beat the snot out of him if he invited himself along though. Sister's priviledge.