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4/19/2008 c1 103Jesse the Storyteller
(Rachel, I feel bad that I didn't even notice this stuff was up, and it's like OLD where have I BEEN!)

:P You always tend to do poetry with short lines. It's fun and childlike and sing-song-y.

I like how the beginning and the end are repetitive.

I really like the line "And passes you by" because it makes it seem like we're outside of this magical world.

It's really cute - like something that would be on a bookmark at the library. :P I like it. :D

-Jesse

Oh the glory of the review marathon! (Link in my profile)
6/19/2005 c1 38gypsylass
wow, this is a really fun poem. i can see it as like a kids book.. good job with the poem!
5/26/2005 c1 Ivriniel
Wow, a very nice description! ^^
5/26/2005 c1 59queenofthbritons
I like the last line espeicially how it repeats the opening of the poem, ties it all together very nicely. well done.

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