for Dunlariér4/19/2008 c1 
103Jesse the Storyteller
(Rachel, I feel bad that I didn't even notice this stuff was up, and it's like OLD where have I BEEN!)
:P You always tend to do poetry with short lines. It's fun and childlike and sing-song-y.
I like how the beginning and the end are repetitive.
I really like the line "And passes you by" because it makes it seem like we're outside of this magical world.
It's really cute - like something that would be on a bookmark at the library. :P I like it. :D
-Jesse
Oh the glory of the review marathon! (Link in my profile)
103Jesse the Storyteller(Rachel, I feel bad that I didn't even notice this stuff was up, and it's like OLD where have I BEEN!)
:P You always tend to do poetry with short lines. It's fun and childlike and sing-song-y.
I like how the beginning and the end are repetitive.
I really like the line "And passes you by" because it makes it seem like we're outside of this magical world.
It's really cute - like something that would be on a bookmark at the library. :P I like it. :D
-Jesse
Oh the glory of the review marathon! (Link in my profile)
6/19/2005 c1 38gypsylass
wow, this is a really fun poem. i can see it as like a kids book.. good job with the poem!
38gypsylasswow, this is a really fun poem. i can see it as like a kids book.. good job with the poem!
5/26/2005 c1 59queenofthbritons
I like the last line espeicially how it repeats the opening of the poem, ties it all together very nicely. well done.
59queenofthbritonsI like the last line espeicially how it repeats the opening of the poem, ties it all together very nicely. well done.