for Zoning Out2/18/2010 c27 
9IHateMyLoveLife
I have to say that I truly enjoyed reading this. It intrigued me. I loved how everything was connected and made sense in the end. You wrapped up most of the loose ties, and left it wide open for a sequel.
The style was interesting and it reminded me of Peter Pan. How it's in third person but the narrator is taking you through the journey and talking to the audience. Using it made some of the transitions work very well, for example the end of the last chapter.
9IHateMyLoveLifeI have to say that I truly enjoyed reading this. It intrigued me. I loved how everything was connected and made sense in the end. You wrapped up most of the loose ties, and left it wide open for a sequel.
The style was interesting and it reminded me of Peter Pan. How it's in third person but the narrator is taking you through the journey and talking to the audience. Using it made some of the transitions work very well, for example the end of the last chapter.
3/29/2008 c27 8Alan Wellest
Quite a good read. After reading it, i came to a conculsion. U are SICK. The torture of Rhea and Cronus is just plain gross. Eating babies..eww. Only could find one fault - Please use smth to indicate change of scence. I was left wondering lots of times, had to double read the part when the scence just jumped without any signs. Good job. 3.5/5
8Alan WellestQuite a good read. After reading it, i came to a conculsion. U are SICK. The torture of Rhea and Cronus is just plain gross. Eating babies..eww. Only could find one fault - Please use smth to indicate change of scence. I was left wondering lots of times, had to double read the part when the scence just jumped without any signs. Good job. 3.5/5
3/11/2007 c27 Lilly
Fantastic! And, believe me when I say, that's the least I can say about your story! It'a amazing the way you put everything on it's right place.
Congrtulations you are a hell of a writer and I hope you keep up the good work!
Fantastic! And, believe me when I say, that's the least I can say about your story! It'a amazing the way you put everything on it's right place.
Congrtulations you are a hell of a writer and I hope you keep up the good work!
10/11/2006 c27 2Barraketh
*spazzes out.
Ahh, that was amazing. Even though I knew what was going to happen in advance, because I read the beginning of the second one... first.
But anyway. Will there be a Mnemosyne in the next one to restore the librarian's memory?
I can't wait.
2Barraketh*spazzes out.
Ahh, that was amazing. Even though I knew what was going to happen in advance, because I read the beginning of the second one... first.
But anyway. Will there be a Mnemosyne in the next one to restore the librarian's memory?
I can't wait.
10/11/2006 c17 Barraketh
I don't understand why this story has so few reviews. It's... magnificent. Yeh. I'mstillreading, and I have six hours of shift left I think I'll finish today.
=]
I don't understand why this story has so few reviews. It's... magnificent. Yeh. I'mstillreading, and I have six hours of shift left I think I'll finish today.
=]
10/11/2006 c13 Barraketh
It's so exciting, I forget to review. But I'm still here. And I'm still hooked. I'm sorry I can't offer any valuable critisizm, but... I'm happy to be reading.
=]
It's so exciting, I forget to review. But I'm still here. And I'm still hooked. I'm sorry I can't offer any valuable critisizm, but... I'm happy to be reading.
=]
10/11/2006 c7 Barraketh
The attention to detail that you've put into this astounds me. The way all the pieces fit together... The quotes from Shakespear and Milton.
I can't count the times I've had a chill run up my spine in the reading of this.
It's thrilling, really.
The attention to detail that you've put into this astounds me. The way all the pieces fit together... The quotes from Shakespear and Milton.
I can't count the times I've had a chill run up my spine in the reading of this.
It's thrilling, really.
10/11/2006 c6 Barraketh
I love it when pieces fall together!
This amused me too:
"Bob would later become a well-respected film critic who despised superhero movies and praised kitchen-sink dramas. This, however, did not improve his popularity."
Kind of reminds me of a line from one of those 'hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy' books. Kudos!
I love it when pieces fall together!
This amused me too:
"Bob would later become a well-respected film critic who despised superhero movies and praised kitchen-sink dramas. This, however, did not improve his popularity."
Kind of reminds me of a line from one of those 'hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy' books. Kudos!
10/11/2006 c4 Barraketh
Aah, I love this story! It's so unpredictable... I can't wait to see what happens next!
Aah, I love this story! It's so unpredictable... I can't wait to see what happens next!
10/9/2006 c2 Barraketh
I went from the second Zoning Out to the first. It's a rare storytelling that shock like chapter one did. I'msoexcited.
-derek.
I went from the second Zoning Out to the first. It's a rare storytelling that shock like chapter one did. I'msoexcited.
-derek.
9/11/2006 c1 4Sakka-Fenikkusu
I just read the first chapter, and I must say this is quite an intriguing story.
4Sakka-FenikkusuI just read the first chapter, and I must say this is quite an intriguing story.
7/22/2006 c27 1randomcindyness
My god, I love this story to death! I'm gladI came upon your stories. Well, hope you have a nice day! Bye bye!... Time to read part II -.-'
~LostDreamer25
1randomcindynessMy god, I love this story to death! I'm gladI came upon your stories. Well, hope you have a nice day! Bye bye!... Time to read part II -.-'
~LostDreamer25
7/21/2006 c20 randomcindyness
lol, yeah, i kinda figured everything out a couple of chapters back. but the puzzle is so extiting, i can't stay away from your stories! the way make make the puzzle so confusing! jeez, my mom is yelling at me to get off the computer, lol, that won't happen anytime soon!
~LostDreamer25
lol, yeah, i kinda figured everything out a couple of chapters back. but the puzzle is so extiting, i can't stay away from your stories! the way make make the puzzle so confusing! jeez, my mom is yelling at me to get off the computer, lol, that won't happen anytime soon!
~LostDreamer25
7/20/2006 c11 randomcindyness
wow, very nice! haha, i had to look up morphine in the dictonary... lol but it was worth it! i'm learing alot from your stories and i'm totally loving it! ^-^
~LostDreamer25
wow, very nice! haha, i had to look up morphine in the dictonary... lol but it was worth it! i'm learing alot from your stories and i'm totally loving it! ^-^
~LostDreamer25