for Double, Double, Toil, and Tiffany's?10/8/2005 c7 
19Lara Bykirk
This was a good chapter, for the most part...I'm really excited to see where this story's going. I'd just suggest stretching the story out a little more. It seemed a little rushed. Some more description and some more explaining of emotions would help.
19Lara BykirkThis was a good chapter, for the most part...I'm really excited to see where this story's going. I'd just suggest stretching the story out a little more. It seemed a little rushed. Some more description and some more explaining of emotions would help.
9/13/2005 c1 1rrmehta364
i like all the characters. seem like normal people. i dont see harry potter in the story but im sure its all to easy to borrow ideas from J.K rowling. a lttle more descriptiodn would be nice. umm, thats it
1rrmehta364i like all the characters. seem like normal people. i dont see harry potter in the story but im sure its all to easy to borrow ideas from J.K rowling. a lttle more descriptiodn would be nice. umm, thats it
9/11/2005 c6 2temblance
More awesome humor here...this story makes me laugh so much! Good job with the chapter.
2temblanceMore awesome humor here...this story makes me laugh so much! Good job with the chapter.
9/10/2005 c4 9ice flyer
hilarious as usual! sorry i'm so abysmally slow with reviews, i'm just a busy gal, but i really do like this and i'll eventually catch up. anyway..i seriously laughed out loud at this..the only thing i thought was a lil weird was the switching from first person to third - it's generally not done. anyway..nice chap!
9ice flyerhilarious as usual! sorry i'm so abysmally slow with reviews, i'm just a busy gal, but i really do like this and i'll eventually catch up. anyway..i seriously laughed out loud at this..the only thing i thought was a lil weird was the switching from first person to third - it's generally not done. anyway..nice chap!
9/10/2005 c6 19Lara Bykirk
I like it. A lot. I think I know where this is going, and it will be hilarious... I'm glad to see that the incursion of the witches was taken care of in a rather logical manner. It made sense, and now I understand more why you put them in the story in the first place. Very nice story.
19Lara BykirkI like it. A lot. I think I know where this is going, and it will be hilarious... I'm glad to see that the incursion of the witches was taken care of in a rather logical manner. It made sense, and now I understand more why you put them in the story in the first place. Very nice story.
8/29/2005 c5 2temblance
I really liked this chapter. it was maybe not as humourous as the last couple, but good all the same. It's so fun to read about what Grandam is up to next.
2temblanceI really liked this chapter. it was maybe not as humourous as the last couple, but good all the same. It's so fun to read about what Grandam is up to next.
8/23/2005 c3 9ice flyer
your characters are really funny. this chap was a little short but it was long on humor and introduced some plot, so good job. i love your title btw. :)
9ice flyeryour characters are really funny. this chap was a little short but it was long on humor and introduced some plot, so good job. i love your title btw. :)
8/23/2005 c2 ice flyer
i really like your sense of humor. tasia is such a feisty heroine, i like her a lot. sorry i haven't reviewed in a while, i..forgot (looks guilty..) reading on..
i really like your sense of humor. tasia is such a feisty heroine, i like her a lot. sorry i haven't reviewed in a while, i..forgot (looks guilty..) reading on..
8/23/2005 c5 19Lara Bykirk
Nice chapter. I really like Zacharius. I'm very eager to read more about him. I also liked Tasia's section. She is really funny to read.
19Lara BykirkNice chapter. I really like Zacharius. I'm very eager to read more about him. I also liked Tasia's section. She is really funny to read.
8/14/2005 c5 11Earthsong12
Oops! That's gotta be embarrassing, coming to discover the contest was canceled. Hehe. Great story, keep writing!
11Earthsong12Oops! That's gotta be embarrassing, coming to discover the contest was canceled. Hehe. Great story, keep writing!
8/14/2005 c3 Earthsong12
Hmm, I wonder what the prize is for "wickedest witch"? I love Muriel and Mary Agnes; your characters are great.
Hmm, I wonder what the prize is for "wickedest witch"? I love Muriel and Mary Agnes; your characters are great.
8/14/2005 c2 Earthsong12
"I loathe smug eyebrow raisers!"? Hah! love that line! ^_^ Great story, very amusing and very real.
"I loathe smug eyebrow raisers!"? Hah! love that line! ^_^ Great story, very amusing and very real.
8/13/2005 c4 2temblance
“Hello.” Grandam says this seductively, or at least, what her opinion is of seductively. She really sounds like a braying monkey, high on cocaine, or one too many insects off its mate’s head.
~~it's those kind of lines that make me really like the story. That one was especially hilarious.
I noticed this chapter that the main part of the story is in present tense. that's unusual, but you seem to be doing a good job with it. When you do pov changes, though, you switch it to past tense. Is that intentional? If it is, it's perfectly fine-it was just something I noticed. Anyway, I think Grandam is quite the character. She adds the most personality to the story. Good chapter.
2temblance“Hello.” Grandam says this seductively, or at least, what her opinion is of seductively. She really sounds like a braying monkey, high on cocaine, or one too many insects off its mate’s head.
~~it's those kind of lines that make me really like the story. That one was especially hilarious.
I noticed this chapter that the main part of the story is in present tense. that's unusual, but you seem to be doing a good job with it. When you do pov changes, though, you switch it to past tense. Is that intentional? If it is, it's perfectly fine-it was just something I noticed. Anyway, I think Grandam is quite the character. She adds the most personality to the story. Good chapter.
8/13/2005 c3 temblance
The wickedest witch contest was a creative idea, especially with Muriel's reaction to it. Mary Agnes seems kind of clueless though-vain, too, with all those beauty potions. That was a nice detail to add in, by the way.
The wickedest witch contest was a creative idea, especially with Muriel's reaction to it. Mary Agnes seems kind of clueless though-vain, too, with all those beauty potions. That was a nice detail to add in, by the way.