for Endless Dark6/23/2005 c1 
190Miz E. Mak
I like it, but for some reason the "endless dark" thing just rubbed me the wrong way. I would change it to "endless night" just because night emplies so much more than just dark and it feels/sounds better. But thats me.
Great work. Keep writing.
190Miz E. MakI like it, but for some reason the "endless dark" thing just rubbed me the wrong way. I would change it to "endless night" just because night emplies so much more than just dark and it feels/sounds better. But thats me.
Great work. Keep writing.
5/30/2005 c1 90poetic abortion
very inspiring. dark and a bit frightening when given a bit more thought, taking it literally as in some one being made into a slave and other such ways you could put it. either way this is still amazing and beautifully written. though not really your best, I still see it as a well written and suspenseful read. nearly perfect but a bit vague, not very detailed but it is still great. I find little fault in it. ^_^ beautifully done!
!~* noelle *~!
90poetic abortionvery inspiring. dark and a bit frightening when given a bit more thought, taking it literally as in some one being made into a slave and other such ways you could put it. either way this is still amazing and beautifully written. though not really your best, I still see it as a well written and suspenseful read. nearly perfect but a bit vague, not very detailed but it is still great. I find little fault in it. ^_^ beautifully done!
!~* noelle *~!
5/30/2005 c1 8Slowly Sinking
Hmm... not sure about the form - feels too brief to really capture the idea - but still good, I guess maybe the form enhances the 'trapped' idea... Very emotive poem either way, keep it up.
8Slowly SinkingHmm... not sure about the form - feels too brief to really capture the idea - but still good, I guess maybe the form enhances the 'trapped' idea... Very emotive poem either way, keep it up.