for Thou should try those tears of sadness10/21/2005 c1 blarghshima
Horrible. Just horrible.
Bad...very bad.
In so many ways.
Even the "non-rhyme" scheme is bad.
Just...no...
Stop writing and save us all from torture.
Horrible. Just horrible.
Bad...very bad.
In so many ways.
Even the "non-rhyme" scheme is bad.
Just...no...
Stop writing and save us all from torture.
6/30/2005 c1 
11Locomotive Breath
Not bad overall, but it could use some work. I thought it was quite pretty but the last line's length threw off the meter and flow of the poem. Also, the old English sounds kind of random.
11Locomotive BreathNot bad overall, but it could use some work. I thought it was quite pretty but the last line's length threw off the meter and flow of the poem. Also, the old English sounds kind of random.
6/2/2005 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
Powerful and passionate, I loved it, keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietPowerful and passionate, I loved it, keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.