for Blankets7/4/2006 c1 NO LONGER USING
*wow, very good, I love your description, which was imacualte by the way...
*wow, very good, I love your description, which was imacualte by the way...
11/3/2005 c1 
132silently watching
this is so great!
i actually read it a while ago, but never reviewed. it is real good and i DEFINITELY think you are a MUCH better writer that me.
(i also think i misspelled definitely)
132silently watchingthis is so great!
i actually read it a while ago, but never reviewed. it is real good and i DEFINITELY think you are a MUCH better writer that me.
(i also think i misspelled definitely)
10/26/2005 c1 121Wishdreamer89
Adorable with well-description. You've protrayed this child's world very nicely. What you could work on is the repeation of "She" and "little girl". Maybe it'd be best to introduce her name before hand, but not too bluntly. For instance she could imagine what her Mother'd do if she was awoken late "_, what did i tell you?" ya know? Than simply slide her name in. And also, try to add less for more. What I mean by that is by instead of saying "she thinks her face was too thin..." say it IS to thin for her eyes- you know what I mean. But this sees like a potientally strong quite interesting story. Ya might want to develop on it!
121Wishdreamer89Adorable with well-description. You've protrayed this child's world very nicely. What you could work on is the repeation of "She" and "little girl". Maybe it'd be best to introduce her name before hand, but not too bluntly. For instance she could imagine what her Mother'd do if she was awoken late "_, what did i tell you?" ya know? Than simply slide her name in. And also, try to add less for more. What I mean by that is by instead of saying "she thinks her face was too thin..." say it IS to thin for her eyes- you know what I mean. But this sees like a potientally strong quite interesting story. Ya might want to develop on it!
7/6/2005 c1 12My Dark Destiny
Wow! That is so good. I really wish I could help the little girl. Love ya1 Always, My Dark Destiny
12My Dark DestinyWow! That is so good. I really wish I could help the little girl. Love ya1 Always, My Dark Destiny
6/13/2005 c1 18SportylilChica
wow...this is really good! Please update soon! The emotions and anxiety you get...wow i've got goose bumps! Great job!
18SportylilChicawow...this is really good! Please update soon! The emotions and anxiety you get...wow i've got goose bumps! Great job!