for Soft White Flowers6/6/2005 c1 
10somerandomdude
Hmm, the use of the word "cadaver" is very... striking, for lack of a better term. I don't know if it's intentional or not, I get a sense of terrible hate from this poem.
10somerandomdudeHmm, the use of the word "cadaver" is very... striking, for lack of a better term. I don't know if it's intentional or not, I get a sense of terrible hate from this poem.
6/6/2005 c1 senbi
Haunting. Nice use of 'cadaver' & the imagery of white flowers being soft.
Haunting. Nice use of 'cadaver' & the imagery of white flowers being soft.
6/6/2005 c1 216ygg
The use of the word "cadaver" makes it rather disturbing and raw, but that's beautifully counterbalanced by the "comforting with soft white flowers". Together it conveys a very powerful, astonishing image of two polarities joined in one instant, portrayed by only a few very well-chosen words (soft vs the grossness of "cadaver" and "dying now"; white vs the black aura of death). Sublime, truly amazing work! It's one of the best I've ever read. Please keep writing :)
216yggThe use of the word "cadaver" makes it rather disturbing and raw, but that's beautifully counterbalanced by the "comforting with soft white flowers". Together it conveys a very powerful, astonishing image of two polarities joined in one instant, portrayed by only a few very well-chosen words (soft vs the grossness of "cadaver" and "dying now"; white vs the black aura of death). Sublime, truly amazing work! It's one of the best I've ever read. Please keep writing :)
6/5/2005 c1 vague shadow
wow...that's kind of disturbing. I liked it. ^_^ It had an almost gothic, Edgar Allen Poe feel to it. Good job!
~CR
wow...that's kind of disturbing. I liked it. ^_^ It had an almost gothic, Edgar Allen Poe feel to it. Good job!
~CR