for Escape6/23/2005 c1 
1i-rite-gud
That made me cry. I have tears rolling down my cheeks right now. That was a beautiful sad poem.
1i-rite-gudThat made me cry. I have tears rolling down my cheeks right now. That was a beautiful sad poem.
6/21/2005 c1 34misery re
Lovely poem. There was one line that distracted me making me read it a couple times: "And watch the stars be born as I watch." You stated twice in this line about watching the stars. I hope you understand what I'm trying to say. This poem is wonderful. Love the use of the sun.
34misery reLovely poem. There was one line that distracted me making me read it a couple times: "And watch the stars be born as I watch." You stated twice in this line about watching the stars. I hope you understand what I'm trying to say. This poem is wonderful. Love the use of the sun.
6/13/2005 c1 The Mujah
Loneliness is a tough one, no?Even stronger than the last one, although the ending could use a little bit of work in terms of flow and termination.
Loneliness is a tough one, no?Even stronger than the last one, although the ending could use a little bit of work in terms of flow and termination.
6/10/2005 c1 queenofthbritons
how true considering that our first instinct is to try and escape ssomething that threatens us. good work here. I like how you work the sun into it alot. nicely done.
how true considering that our first instinct is to try and escape ssomething that threatens us. good work here. I like how you work the sun into it alot. nicely done.
6/9/2005 c1 14method acting
very touching. I love the ending and I can really relate to the topic. I think everyone can. I love the last eight lines, really brings it all together. Nice job.
14method actingvery touching. I love the ending and I can really relate to the topic. I think everyone can. I love the last eight lines, really brings it all together. Nice job.
6/7/2005 c1 90WiltingBlackRose
This is really good...All of your poems always hit a spot in my heart...they make me want to cry...That takes a lot too...Good job on this poem.
90WiltingBlackRoseThis is really good...All of your poems always hit a spot in my heart...they make me want to cry...That takes a lot too...Good job on this poem.
6/7/2005 c1 79Sorrowful Dreams
this is really good. Deep and touching. I love the way it is written and emotions
~Sorrow~
79Sorrowful Dreamsthis is really good. Deep and touching. I love the way it is written and emotions
~Sorrow~