for Mae6/25/2006 c1 whacked
there's something very sweet about this story in a sort of bitter way, i kinda went on to imagine what could possibly happen next, and yes Mae moving in with Travis might be slightly unrealistic, but also understandable (for the plot)...nice work!
there's something very sweet about this story in a sort of bitter way, i kinda went on to imagine what could possibly happen next, and yes Mae moving in with Travis might be slightly unrealistic, but also understandable (for the plot)...nice work!
4/22/2006 c1 
1Mosaic Stains
I like this one over the other one a lot better, it had a soft, semi-true touch to it.
Oh yeah, before I forget to write this down, thanks for the review. I'm glad you at least read the two of them, unlike others(that could be frustrating). As well as thanks for the typo put, since I had yet to recorrect Mirelle's story I didn't see it.
Anyways the thing about Elias's story, I actually did put it was a month later inside the second part, but I also forgot to take away that one month thing. So thanks for telling me that also; it made me go back and fix them some, or at least up to what I saw.Also to adding Laurel's input within the short story, I didn't want to. Considering that, as I put to one of my reviewers, a spouse cheating is something I dispise deeply. So basically her input wasn't important as she broke the principle of marriage to Elias. And the way I figured it Laurel just happened to fall out of love with Elias. Her being shallow was true, but not timid.
So once more, thanks again for reviewing me.
1Mosaic StainsI like this one over the other one a lot better, it had a soft, semi-true touch to it.
Oh yeah, before I forget to write this down, thanks for the review. I'm glad you at least read the two of them, unlike others(that could be frustrating). As well as thanks for the typo put, since I had yet to recorrect Mirelle's story I didn't see it.
Anyways the thing about Elias's story, I actually did put it was a month later inside the second part, but I also forgot to take away that one month thing. So thanks for telling me that also; it made me go back and fix them some, or at least up to what I saw.Also to adding Laurel's input within the short story, I didn't want to. Considering that, as I put to one of my reviewers, a spouse cheating is something I dispise deeply. So basically her input wasn't important as she broke the principle of marriage to Elias. And the way I figured it Laurel just happened to fall out of love with Elias. Her being shallow was true, but not timid.
So once more, thanks again for reviewing me.
2/12/2006 c1 4Gwir
Ya know what? Life isnt realistic, so yay. Down with reality. It's my new most hated word.
-*hands you a cookie*- Thanks for commenting on "Sweetest Obsession"... It's... no longer a one-shot, although it's still writen like one. So it's a Two-shot. And it may go farther, I'm not sure. Depends how much I need to write.
4GwirYa know what? Life isnt realistic, so yay. Down with reality. It's my new most hated word.
-*hands you a cookie*- Thanks for commenting on "Sweetest Obsession"... It's... no longer a one-shot, although it's still writen like one. So it's a Two-shot. And it may go farther, I'm not sure. Depends how much I need to write.
11/30/2005 c1 hey maria
I dunno if it's realistic either, Travis having to take care of Mae, but this is still a wonderful story. Mae's apology to Travis...that was such a heartbreaking moment.
I dunno if it's realistic either, Travis having to take care of Mae, but this is still a wonderful story. Mae's apology to Travis...that was such a heartbreaking moment.
8/29/2005 c1 26invisible.writer
I truly enjoyed this story, mostly because of the reality in it. The story itself is very lifelike and believable - well, perhaps the coincidence of Travis and Mae in the same house, but hey, it could happen. Travis was a well-plotted character because he acted how anyone in that position would act, and I like how he's a bit helpless. Mae's character was beautiful and childlike without being truly naive. I also love the way you spell her name - there's a band named that as well and I wonder if that's where you got the spelling? Very well done. Thank-you for the read!
26invisible.writerI truly enjoyed this story, mostly because of the reality in it. The story itself is very lifelike and believable - well, perhaps the coincidence of Travis and Mae in the same house, but hey, it could happen. Travis was a well-plotted character because he acted how anyone in that position would act, and I like how he's a bit helpless. Mae's character was beautiful and childlike without being truly naive. I also love the way you spell her name - there's a band named that as well and I wonder if that's where you got the spelling? Very well done. Thank-you for the read!
7/1/2005 c1 PiNk DUck FrauD
Hey, again it's wonderfully written. I don't think it's a tragedy, though... because Mae lives and begins to rebuild her spirit/life. That's just my opinion but again you've taken something simple and given it a depth of emotion that just fits. The characters compliment each other so well yet it's almost like a sibling or friendly relationship.
I know a little about social workers and the situation is impractice, but somehow, your story makes it okay. I think with Travis was the best place for Mae. Beautifuly done.
Hey, again it's wonderfully written. I don't think it's a tragedy, though... because Mae lives and begins to rebuild her spirit/life. That's just my opinion but again you've taken something simple and given it a depth of emotion that just fits. The characters compliment each other so well yet it's almost like a sibling or friendly relationship.
I know a little about social workers and the situation is impractice, but somehow, your story makes it okay. I think with Travis was the best place for Mae. Beautifuly done.
6/7/2005 c1 2gymnat10
I actually like this story a lot. It was very deep, and pretty real as far as I'm concerned. Well anyway, keep up the good work.
2gymnat10I actually like this story a lot. It was very deep, and pretty real as far as I'm concerned. Well anyway, keep up the good work.
6/7/2005 c1 11les petits bateaux
Great story...it was very touching how Travis bothered to take care of her...update soon!:)
~~Trinity
11les petits bateauxGreat story...it was very touching how Travis bothered to take care of her...update soon!:)
~~Trinity