for she7/16/2010 c1 
173Little girl Big world
"-lures you with her billboard eyes"
I can just picture these eyes, big and bright. Wonderful way to describe it.
I really like the concept of this poem and the way you put it all together. Nicely written!
173Little girl Big world"-lures you with her billboard eyes"
I can just picture these eyes, big and bright. Wonderful way to describe it.
I really like the concept of this poem and the way you put it all together. Nicely written!
1/26/2006 c1 3atrophies
Beautiful. I love the format and the general message; the similes and imagery. And the ohsoperfect flow. :]
3atrophiesBeautiful. I love the format and the general message; the similes and imagery. And the ohsoperfect flow. :]
8/17/2005 c1 30a e i o u and sometimes y
Beautiful. I really love the format of this. And I must say that the 2nd to last stanza was my favorite. Cheers!
30a e i o u and sometimes yBeautiful. I really love the format of this. And I must say that the 2nd to last stanza was my favorite. Cheers!
7/27/2005 c1 26Chi Ame
Excellent, more of that unique style of yours that I've already come to love. The ending could have been stronger, and that would make this one of your best (in my opinion).
26Chi AmeExcellent, more of that unique style of yours that I've already come to love. The ending could have been stronger, and that would make this one of your best (in my opinion).
7/8/2005 c1 52godsandstars
ah i love this. it reminds me of a hollywood night, and that is always something that makes me happy. you did a great job...i love it.
52godsandstarsah i love this. it reminds me of a hollywood night, and that is always something that makes me happy. you did a great job...i love it.
6/27/2005 c1 80citrus scented
wicked, delicous, juicy poem.elganct flow to it- really enhances the pure drop dead vicious but beautiful character you're describing. mesmorising poem, and some wonderfully vivid descriptions of her- very effective.
80citrus scentedwicked, delicous, juicy poem.elganct flow to it- really enhances the pure drop dead vicious but beautiful character you're describing. mesmorising poem, and some wonderfully vivid descriptions of her- very effective.
6/24/2005 c1 74laughter at the funeral
you have a very sophisticated style of writing...oh and the word "pickes" doesn't have to have an "e:...pls do try checking out my poems...thanks...
truly yours...
74laughter at the funeralyou have a very sophisticated style of writing...oh and the word "pickes" doesn't have to have an "e:...pls do try checking out my poems...thanks...
truly yours...
6/21/2005 c1 37negligible fictional force
GENIUS. pure genius. jeez louise; pun fully intended. -wallflower.
37negligible fictional forceGENIUS. pure genius. jeez louise; pun fully intended. -wallflower.
6/13/2005 c1 Mos
HAHAHAHA! this is pro stuff! haha... just hope its not how u feel of me ay? he
HAHAHAHA! this is pro stuff! haha... just hope its not how u feel of me ay? he
6/13/2005 c1 randomunknown
I love this. I especially liked "only the best, only the best." like you were muttering, or thinking out loud.
I love this. I especially liked "only the best, only the best." like you were muttering, or thinking out loud.
6/11/2005 c1 94smile persephone
I love the imagery and the format! I adore the second to last stanza. Beautifully written!
94smile persephoneI love the imagery and the format! I adore the second to last stanza. Beautifully written!
6/11/2005 c1 10Mysteriously Trapped
i really like this. love the whole picture that you paint here. some women really are like that... i guess... very embarressed and sorry about that..
10Mysteriously Trappedi really like this. love the whole picture that you paint here. some women really are like that... i guess... very embarressed and sorry about that..