for Beautiful1/19/2010 c4 Penpaperaser
*squeals* I love it! It's so sweet. And I love the line "We barely knew each other. I wasn't in love with him. He wasn't in love with me. But I could fall in love with him." It's a nice twist from similar stories. I like the witty conversations as well. There were a few spelling mistakes though, but they are probably typos :) Anyway, this was great!
*squeals* I love it! It's so sweet. And I love the line "We barely knew each other. I wasn't in love with him. He wasn't in love with me. But I could fall in love with him." It's a nice twist from similar stories. I like the witty conversations as well. There were a few spelling mistakes though, but they are probably typos :) Anyway, this was great!
1/18/2010 c1 
3strawberrycrush
'you take arrogance to new and dizzying heights'..my favorite line fron 'hello kitty'...apears again..!
I like the concept of the girl not being anti-relationship...! :))
3strawberrycrush'you take arrogance to new and dizzying heights'..my favorite line fron 'hello kitty'...apears again..!
I like the concept of the girl not being anti-relationship...! :))
1/5/2010 c4 Icyfire4w5
Yum, yum, this story is a breeze to read because it's short, fluffy and light-hearted. I'm glad that it's sugary sweet, not awfully mushy.
Yum, yum, this story is a breeze to read because it's short, fluffy and light-hearted. I'm glad that it's sugary sweet, not awfully mushy.
1/5/2010 c1 Icyfire4w5
Yeah, you're right. According to my teacher, "romantic love" is a relatively modern concept. Joie denies that she's a cynic, but she's indeed one, and I'm wondering how she'll ever fall in love, or um, just have a fling.
Yeah, you're right. According to my teacher, "romantic love" is a relatively modern concept. Joie denies that she's a cynic, but she's indeed one, and I'm wondering how she'll ever fall in love, or um, just have a fling.
12/27/2009 c4 Of The Angels
I hate to be like all the others, but wow. I'm in awe of you.
This story was beautifully written.
Joie reminds me a lot of myself, and you got me really thinking with this little story.
Thank you for taking the time out and writting this.
You've given me a new insight on the whole concept of love.
I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future.
Wishing you the best of luck,
Angelica.
I hate to be like all the others, but wow. I'm in awe of you.
This story was beautifully written.
Joie reminds me a lot of myself, and you got me really thinking with this little story.
Thank you for taking the time out and writting this.
You've given me a new insight on the whole concept of love.
I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future.
Wishing you the best of luck,
Angelica.
12/14/2009 c4 xyz
very very very well written,,you've made me a fan darlin,
very very very well written,,you've made me a fan darlin,
9/19/2009 c4 Elle Winters 9
it sounds so very real. beautifully written, espcially the final chapter.
=)
it sounds so very real. beautifully written, espcially the final chapter.
=)
8/21/2009 c4 4Chryse
One word: lovely. More Words: I really appreciate the distinction between love and the possibility of it.
4ChryseOne word: lovely. More Words: I really appreciate the distinction between love and the possibility of it.
7/3/2009 c4 3ErosRevolution09
This sort of work reminds me of modern day movies. There are two types of movies, the first filled with mindless action scenes, explosions and corny recycled one liners without any real depth or further interpretation the second type of movie requires acting. The latter doesn't need a single gunshot, fight scene or explosion to enhance the storyline. It is actual acting, emotional connection, plot development. Your story is something that develops very well and most importantly makes you concerned for the characters. The key to good writing is the ability to genuinely want something to happen in the story, and in this instance it's wanting to see Danny and Joie swallow their pride and embrace what they feel. It is interesting to find decent dialogue in modern day writing.
3ErosRevolution09This sort of work reminds me of modern day movies. There are two types of movies, the first filled with mindless action scenes, explosions and corny recycled one liners without any real depth or further interpretation the second type of movie requires acting. The latter doesn't need a single gunshot, fight scene or explosion to enhance the storyline. It is actual acting, emotional connection, plot development. Your story is something that develops very well and most importantly makes you concerned for the characters. The key to good writing is the ability to genuinely want something to happen in the story, and in this instance it's wanting to see Danny and Joie swallow their pride and embrace what they feel. It is interesting to find decent dialogue in modern day writing.
6/16/2009 c4 8CatProduttore
Once again, fantastic. I don't know what to say anymore! There is nothing wrong in your stories, not even a typo!
8CatProduttoreOnce again, fantastic. I don't know what to say anymore! There is nothing wrong in your stories, not even a typo!
6/2/2009 c4 A Merry Savant
I like a lot. It feels a tad cliche... but I don't think I know my way around the typical cliches well enough to consider them cliches, so I'll leave this as: a nice story that sums up the situation of the ideal persistent man going after the insecure girl.
But honestly, a line on peanut butter? Haha I'd like to read something else of yours that brings up "What's real and what's not," that'd be interesting.
I like a lot. It feels a tad cliche... but I don't think I know my way around the typical cliches well enough to consider them cliches, so I'll leave this as: a nice story that sums up the situation of the ideal persistent man going after the insecure girl.
But honestly, a line on peanut butter? Haha I'd like to read something else of yours that brings up "What's real and what's not," that'd be interesting.