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6/19/2005 c1 9Eyetk
Wow..this is one emotion-filled story. Kudos.

Taking a step back, I might suggest that you either take out the 'me. He almost...raped me...' in the first paragraph, and either restate it in a later paragraph, or just leave it out entirely. Either way, it doesn't make sense for her to state it right at the beginning, when she's just said that she never would-putting it later, or not at all, would help build up suspense with that particular plot point.
6/18/2005 c1 19Jangalian
Aw. That was really good...I've been wanting to finally read something about Kaelea. :D And hey, I have a charrie named Jonathon too... ._. Wewt.Well, I'm hoping to read more of Kaelea soon. :3Lurve, Snuggles.

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