for Woman's World: Apostasy11/26/2008 c20 
2icthus
This chapter only reminded me of how emotionally involved I am with this story and the characters . . . I'm trying not to cry at the moment. If my husband were not sitting at the computer next to me, I would.
And strangely, you describe me in your copy-n-paste review . . . I love your writing, I love cheese (provolone is best), blue is my favorite color, and you are an amazing author. Just so you know.
2icthusThis chapter only reminded me of how emotionally involved I am with this story and the characters . . . I'm trying not to cry at the moment. If my husband were not sitting at the computer next to me, I would.
And strangely, you describe me in your copy-n-paste review . . . I love your writing, I love cheese (provolone is best), blue is my favorite color, and you are an amazing author. Just so you know.
11/26/2008 c19 icthus
In your note you said you were trying to endear Carowyn to us, but this failed entirely as concerning me. It made me want to rip his throat out or something. Why can't he get it through his head that she doesn't want to do things? If I were her, I wouldn't care about politeness - I'd tell him off and stick to what I actually wanted to do.
This chapter makes me just furious with her so called 'friends'.
In your note you said you were trying to endear Carowyn to us, but this failed entirely as concerning me. It made me want to rip his throat out or something. Why can't he get it through his head that she doesn't want to do things? If I were her, I wouldn't care about politeness - I'd tell him off and stick to what I actually wanted to do.
This chapter makes me just furious with her so called 'friends'.
11/26/2008 c15 icthus
You just had to ruin it again, didn't you? I finally start liking this, and you add in another complication that has me wanting to cry and stop reading all over again. Why must you conflict my emotions so much? Grr.
You are twisted, beyond both evil and sadistic. You know that, right? Agh.
If anything happens, I am seriously going to throw a spoon at you.
You just had to ruin it again, didn't you? I finally start liking this, and you add in another complication that has me wanting to cry and stop reading all over again. Why must you conflict my emotions so much? Grr.
You are twisted, beyond both evil and sadistic. You know that, right? Agh.
If anything happens, I am seriously going to throw a spoon at you.
11/26/2008 c14 icthus
Hi. Me again. The emotional one, remember? I keep meaning to leave reviews, but I'm getting all hopeful about this again, so I've been clicking to the next chapter and on and on until now I've suddenly realized that I'm at least two chapters past what I meant to write another review on. I'm sorry! But it's your fault.
Anyway, I remembered on this chapter, and I just want to let you know that I am feeling MUCH better about this story now. Most of it has to do with your author's note back a few chapters about how Laina's not supposed to be what I was afraid she was becoming. Phew! I really need to figure out why that affected me so much, though, seriously . . . It has also helped that my suspicions of Shae not being told anything have been proven false - THANK YOU! I cannot tell you how much that relieves me.
Okay, I'll go back to enjoying your wonderful story. Thank you for writing it!
Hi. Me again. The emotional one, remember? I keep meaning to leave reviews, but I'm getting all hopeful about this again, so I've been clicking to the next chapter and on and on until now I've suddenly realized that I'm at least two chapters past what I meant to write another review on. I'm sorry! But it's your fault.
Anyway, I remembered on this chapter, and I just want to let you know that I am feeling MUCH better about this story now. Most of it has to do with your author's note back a few chapters about how Laina's not supposed to be what I was afraid she was becoming. Phew! I really need to figure out why that affected me so much, though, seriously . . . It has also helped that my suspicions of Shae not being told anything have been proven false - THANK YOU! I cannot tell you how much that relieves me.
Okay, I'll go back to enjoying your wonderful story. Thank you for writing it!
11/26/2008 c11 icthus
Honestly, I probably would have left no review if not for your ghost reader review to copy and paste . . . I love your sense of humor, lol . . .
The reason I have not been leaving reviews is because I've been upset because they're separated, and especially upset because of Laina - my fears were pretty much confirmed in the last chapter regarding her character's development with Shae. That, to me, is a bigger issue than the pregnancy thing . . . though having gone through a few miscarriages it seems that her lost baby would be upsetting me the most (especially since I have a 19-month-old who has pretty much been the sun of my world since he was born).
As it is, while I love your writing and the idea of Woman's World, I simply cannot yet reconcile myself to liking this sequel because of the Laina thing . . . though I'm sure as soon as the main characters get back together and everything I'll like it again. But I'm really scared that even if they get together again, they won't really be together . . . does that make sense?
I'm not sure if I'll be leaving reviews for every chapter after this, however, because I don't want to make you think that I hate the story . . . I mean, I don't, not entirely (just the Laina part, really). Honestly, I'm not really sure why I'm having such a strong reaction to Laina - probably some issues I've never thought to think about or something. Blah. I hate being a woman sometimes.
. . . And why do I get the feeling that Shae will not ever learn of her fate until she shows up in person? You wouldn't do that, would you? Please tell me you're not that sadistic.
Honestly, I probably would have left no review if not for your ghost reader review to copy and paste . . . I love your sense of humor, lol . . .
The reason I have not been leaving reviews is because I've been upset because they're separated, and especially upset because of Laina - my fears were pretty much confirmed in the last chapter regarding her character's development with Shae. That, to me, is a bigger issue than the pregnancy thing . . . though having gone through a few miscarriages it seems that her lost baby would be upsetting me the most (especially since I have a 19-month-old who has pretty much been the sun of my world since he was born).
As it is, while I love your writing and the idea of Woman's World, I simply cannot yet reconcile myself to liking this sequel because of the Laina thing . . . though I'm sure as soon as the main characters get back together and everything I'll like it again. But I'm really scared that even if they get together again, they won't really be together . . . does that make sense?
I'm not sure if I'll be leaving reviews for every chapter after this, however, because I don't want to make you think that I hate the story . . . I mean, I don't, not entirely (just the Laina part, really). Honestly, I'm not really sure why I'm having such a strong reaction to Laina - probably some issues I've never thought to think about or something. Blah. I hate being a woman sometimes.
. . . And why do I get the feeling that Shae will not ever learn of her fate until she shows up in person? You wouldn't do that, would you? Please tell me you're not that sadistic.
11/24/2008 c48 FightersSpirit
I just started reading your stories. I love your style and the way your story conveys life. I am currently takeing an english class at Rhode Island Collage called Zen and literary works. I am going to reccomend your story to my class. I belive it is very enlightening. When it is published I will definaly purchase a copy. Your story is full of Zen concepts and thought procceses I am studying in my class. If you have not studied any form of Buddism it is amazing. You have excilent insight. I would like to reccomend your story to a few of the engligh proffesors at my school to use with your permission of course. I feel that your outlook is enspiring. This story could also fit nicely in our Freedom philosophy class. I really hope if you like to write you continue to do so. When you get closer to getting published or just want to talk send me an E-Mail at:
I just started reading your stories. I love your style and the way your story conveys life. I am currently takeing an english class at Rhode Island Collage called Zen and literary works. I am going to reccomend your story to my class. I belive it is very enlightening. When it is published I will definaly purchase a copy. Your story is full of Zen concepts and thought procceses I am studying in my class. If you have not studied any form of Buddism it is amazing. You have excilent insight. I would like to reccomend your story to a few of the engligh proffesors at my school to use with your permission of course. I feel that your outlook is enspiring. This story could also fit nicely in our Freedom philosophy class. I really hope if you like to write you continue to do so. When you get closer to getting published or just want to talk send me an E-Mail at:
11/24/2008 c48 Ghost reader
My age is: 21
My gender is: Female
My location is: Rhode Island, U.S.A.
My username/name/name I wish to be known as is: FightersSpirit
My age is: 21
My gender is: Female
My location is: Rhode Island, U.S.A.
My username/name/name I wish to be known as is: FightersSpirit
11/23/2008 c3 2Nurse. Wanna-B
I just wanted to let you know about a small errpor i found, its not a big deal and you probably already know about it but just in case, I think you meant to say she set the device down and, but it came out "Shese the device downand handed me a glass of water." so um yeah. I luv this series, the idea of it is amazing, this is actually my third time reading it but i'm terrible with reviewing and and im terriably sorry, but i do love this story and i would most definetely buy it.
2Nurse. Wanna-BI just wanted to let you know about a small errpor i found, its not a big deal and you probably already know about it but just in case, I think you meant to say she set the device down and, but it came out "Shese the device downand handed me a glass of water." so um yeah. I luv this series, the idea of it is amazing, this is actually my third time reading it but i'm terrible with reviewing and and im terriably sorry, but i do love this story and i would most definetely buy it.
11/16/2008 c10 10cherrypiesizzle
NO! Shae should never betray his mistress! SHe loves him! If he loves her, he would never cheat on her!
10cherrypiesizzleNO! Shae should never betray his mistress! SHe loves him! If he loves her, he would never cheat on her!
10/20/2008 c48 Arenita
My age is: 18
My gender is: female
My location is: Puerto Rico
My username/name/name I wish to be known as is: Ireboricua
My age is: 18
My gender is: female
My location is: Puerto Rico
My username/name/name I wish to be known as is: Ireboricua
10/8/2008 c48 Agape.Philios.Eros
Age: 18, almost
Gender: Female
Location: The approximate location of Ann Arbor, Michigan
Good chapter... I hope she stays behind for Shae
Age: 18, almost
Gender: Female
Location: The approximate location of Ann Arbor, Michigan
Good chapter... I hope she stays behind for Shae
10/8/2008 c45 Agape.Philios.Eros
Ahahaha! Maddox... eblogs...
Anyways, I am an Ex-senior reviewer, I suppose. I kinda of drifted off into nowhere, because I vanished from Fictionpress. Anyhow, my old name was Kythia, and even though I am writing, I am not currently posting. (So dave yourself from visiting my profile, yeah?)
Great job on this sequel. I am enjoying it immensely. I promise to be a good reviewer and not ghost around anymore.
Ahahaha! Maddox... eblogs...
Anyways, I am an Ex-senior reviewer, I suppose. I kinda of drifted off into nowhere, because I vanished from Fictionpress. Anyhow, my old name was Kythia, and even though I am writing, I am not currently posting. (So dave yourself from visiting my profile, yeah?)
Great job on this sequel. I am enjoying it immensely. I promise to be a good reviewer and not ghost around anymore.
9/14/2008 c15 StartsWithALine
You seem like a very interesting person :) I love reading those little copy/paste reviews lol. And I don't hate you for adding Carowyn (btw, love the name). He seems pretty cool.
I am dying to see her reunited with Shae, and continue to desperately count down the chapters.
You seem like a very interesting person :) I love reading those little copy/paste reviews lol. And I don't hate you for adding Carowyn (btw, love the name). He seems pretty cool.
I am dying to see her reunited with Shae, and continue to desperately count down the chapters.
8/27/2008 c58 14key of A major
hi there svonnah,
I gotta say i absolutely adore these series, it reminds me, in a weird round about way of the Twilight series, you know, Edward cullen and the rest. In any case i loved it so much i actually read it in pretty much one sitting, so kudos. The last chapter realy did give me goosebumps, I have no doubt that you could get this published if you get it to the right publishing house. I hope it is all you wanted it to be.
Now for a note on your characters, you need to give them passports or something because they are so full of life they are ready to jump off the page and we cant have them being illegal immigrants can we? :D
congratulations.
14key of A majorhi there svonnah,
I gotta say i absolutely adore these series, it reminds me, in a weird round about way of the Twilight series, you know, Edward cullen and the rest. In any case i loved it so much i actually read it in pretty much one sitting, so kudos. The last chapter realy did give me goosebumps, I have no doubt that you could get this published if you get it to the right publishing house. I hope it is all you wanted it to be.
Now for a note on your characters, you need to give them passports or something because they are so full of life they are ready to jump off the page and we cant have them being illegal immigrants can we? :D
congratulations.