for Woman's World: Apostasy6/17/2005 c2 galene
oh cool! I like how everything is from Shae's point of view... its' cool! keep up the good work!
oh cool! I like how everything is from Shae's point of view... its' cool! keep up the good work!
6/17/2005 c2 embersilence
Don't be so hard on yourself. xD It wasn't terrible. It was actually quite good. =)
Anyways, I can't wait for the next chapter. -Pokes it- It's all so interesting. =D Did she say that Shae was an equal? -Blinks- Really? I'm confused now. @_@
Don't be so hard on yourself. xD It wasn't terrible. It was actually quite good. =)
Anyways, I can't wait for the next chapter. -Pokes it- It's all so interesting. =D Did she say that Shae was an equal? -Blinks- Really? I'm confused now. @_@
6/17/2005 c1 Chingo
Great that you already started posting the second part i cant wait to continue reading it... its a great storysigue asi!
Great that you already started posting the second part i cant wait to continue reading it... its a great storysigue asi!
6/17/2005 c2 Ana Ari
I love the continuity. :D It's very interesting...however, when will the Poetess come back? Did she sign papers or something to get Shae to become an equal?
How is her surgery? Poor Shae...:(
I love the continuity. :D It's very interesting...however, when will the Poetess come back? Did she sign papers or something to get Shae to become an equal?
How is her surgery? Poor Shae...:(
6/17/2005 c2 
1pen-ink
Hello!
Am I one of the first reviewers? Lovely. A lucky time to check my e-mails, I guess...:-) No, it wasn't bad at all! In fact, I loved the description. 3rd person was a good choice for this piece. Will her chapters be 1st POV? I empathize with having a hard time writing chapters sans fluff. (sigh)
Um, there were a few gramatical things... Let me get into editor mode... Oh, once you were using "it's" to decribe something in his room and usually you use "its," without an apostrophe. Also, you wrote "an impossible." You might have meant that on purpose, but normally it would be "an impossibility," as a noun.
Okay, hope that helps! Keep up the good work!
1pen-inkHello!
Am I one of the first reviewers? Lovely. A lucky time to check my e-mails, I guess...:-) No, it wasn't bad at all! In fact, I loved the description. 3rd person was a good choice for this piece. Will her chapters be 1st POV? I empathize with having a hard time writing chapters sans fluff. (sigh)
Um, there were a few gramatical things... Let me get into editor mode... Oh, once you were using "it's" to decribe something in his room and usually you use "its," without an apostrophe. Also, you wrote "an impossible." You might have meant that on purpose, but normally it would be "an impossibility," as a noun.
Okay, hope that helps! Keep up the good work!
6/17/2005 c2 virgo-valentina
Please please tell me I'm your first reviewer! I so want to be! Howevr, a great chapter!Waited so long for the sequel. I have been reading your story for a long time but have been too lazy to review. Promise I will review for all the next chaptwer IF you add again and soon!
Please please tell me I'm your first reviewer! I so want to be! Howevr, a great chapter!Waited so long for the sequel. I have been reading your story for a long time but have been too lazy to review. Promise I will review for all the next chaptwer IF you add again and soon!