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6/20/2005 c1 1TechnicolorPants
I've felt that way many times before, the plastics and feeling different...anyway, your poem was the sex!

Love, fruit.
6/17/2005 c1 13Artificial Refuge
Brilliantly written, even if it is very depressing! Nice work though, keep it up
6/17/2005 c1 1itgoesunsaid
wow. i really really like this poem. i can relate to it.
6/17/2005 c1 95beti213
nice! good description-simple, and honest. my only suggestion is perhaps to cut down on the "and then"s. it's good to have a pattern but that phrase is very colloquial and becomes grating after repetition. I like it, though-I was with the girl every moment. well done.

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