for Another Shallow Grave9/28/2005 c1 
2Rejivar
Lovely. I like the flow of it. Not everyone can write descent free verse poetry.
2RejivarLovely. I like the flow of it. Not everyone can write descent free verse poetry.
8/4/2005 c1 82Twilit Exaggerance
Nice enjambment. Love this, "subtle bag of bricks" - great imagery. And whats wrong with guys? We're not that bad :p
82Twilit ExaggeranceNice enjambment. Love this, "subtle bag of bricks" - great imagery. And whats wrong with guys? We're not that bad :p
6/23/2005 c1 59Unholy Haven
This is weird, but not in a bad way. It makes me think. The ending is neat because it's totally unexpected.
59Unholy HavenThis is weird, but not in a bad way. It makes me think. The ending is neat because it's totally unexpected.
6/22/2005 c1 242LauraKM
Great, i love the last line, and the 'subtle bag of bricks. also 'safe here in the straw' some great imagery.
242LauraKMGreat, i love the last line, and the 'subtle bag of bricks. also 'safe here in the straw' some great imagery.
6/20/2005 c1 00900
This is heavy stuff.I get the feeling this has some personal meaning for you, and that what I thought when I read it would be different than that, so I won't comment about what it means for me. But your imagery was very good. Subtle bag of bricks... Thanks for the review!Black Sheep Alone
This is heavy stuff.I get the feeling this has some personal meaning for you, and that what I thought when I read it would be different than that, so I won't comment about what it means for me. But your imagery was very good. Subtle bag of bricks... Thanks for the review!Black Sheep Alone