for the pool of the unforgiven9/6/2005 c1 
5bluewaves64
Interesting! You managed to get my attention within one chapter :) Good job! You might want to add more descriptions to the appearances though.update soon!
5bluewaves64Interesting! You managed to get my attention within one chapter :) Good job! You might want to add more descriptions to the appearances though.update soon!
6/30/2005 c1 3The-unimportant-item
u changed the end! I think I already told you I like this...
~the-unimportant-item
3The-unimportant-itemu changed the end! I think I already told you I like this...
~the-unimportant-item
6/29/2005 c1 68Ildri
the last part kind reminded me of star wars..l "luke, i am you father." ...must be great to have a father who thinks you're pitiful... well, i should know. he doesn't tell me, but i know he thinks it! when charlie told ara that he was pixie i think it was going a little fast... i think carle should have waited before telling her...or you could've wrote more about what was happening to her before she ran away..again and kyle told her...or something like that, but hey it caught my attention so ill keep reading! and probably leave you more really long reviews about ara and charles! XDsee ya!and don't forget to review some of my stuff! ~Painful Bliss
68Ildrithe last part kind reminded me of star wars..l "luke, i am you father." ...must be great to have a father who thinks you're pitiful... well, i should know. he doesn't tell me, but i know he thinks it! when charlie told ara that he was pixie i think it was going a little fast... i think carle should have waited before telling her...or you could've wrote more about what was happening to her before she ran away..again and kyle told her...or something like that, but hey it caught my attention so ill keep reading! and probably leave you more really long reviews about ara and charles! XDsee ya!and don't forget to review some of my stuff! ~Painful Bliss