for Beautiful Day6/4/2006 c1 
86Isis lives
It hurts. This poem actually does, it hurts. I love the irony of the first and last stanzas - the way that the first time you read those lines you just take it on face value, and then the second time it's very bitter and ironical. It's one of those things that you want to change with all your heart but no matter how much you try you'll never be able to help. And this poem conveys that helplessness.
Also, I love the repetition of the idea of 'three' in the fourth stanza and the way it carries on into the fifth. Amazing in every degree, great job.
Keep writing, as always,Isis x
86Isis livesIt hurts. This poem actually does, it hurts. I love the irony of the first and last stanzas - the way that the first time you read those lines you just take it on face value, and then the second time it's very bitter and ironical. It's one of those things that you want to change with all your heart but no matter how much you try you'll never be able to help. And this poem conveys that helplessness.
Also, I love the repetition of the idea of 'three' in the fourth stanza and the way it carries on into the fifth. Amazing in every degree, great job.
Keep writing, as always,Isis x
7/16/2005 c1 62swgirl1000
Nicely, put Shadow Gryphon. Strong and very nicely written you have talent you must shine on it more often.
62swgirl1000Nicely, put Shadow Gryphon. Strong and very nicely written you have talent you must shine on it more often.
7/15/2005 c1 11Cloud Burst
powerful and in a sense, raw. i like the addition of irony, clearly portrays the message with feeling and clearity. well done!
11Cloud Burstpowerful and in a sense, raw. i like the addition of irony, clearly portrays the message with feeling and clearity. well done!
7/12/2005 c1 11Wolfie Star26
Do you want me to hurt Caromir? I'd love to do that you know. Lol.
Anyway, this was a wicked good poem and sad thing is, this is most likely very true. Keep up the great work.
11Wolfie Star26Do you want me to hurt Caromir? I'd love to do that you know. Lol.
Anyway, this was a wicked good poem and sad thing is, this is most likely very true. Keep up the great work.
6/23/2005 c1 Need 'n' Know
At this age... I still don't fully get what "third world" is... Seriously! And what's "second world"? Is THERE a SECOND world? I'm hopeless...
Wow... underweight and overweight?
Great poem... Very thoughtful... It's sad to know all this, though. You want to help, it's just... hard, for some reason. Maybe denial?
Julia.
At this age... I still don't fully get what "third world" is... Seriously! And what's "second world"? Is THERE a SECOND world? I'm hopeless...
Wow... underweight and overweight?
Great poem... Very thoughtful... It's sad to know all this, though. You want to help, it's just... hard, for some reason. Maybe denial?
Julia.