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7/4/2006 c1 NO LONGER USING
clear cut, too the point, brilliant
4/24/2006 c1 108zeanomourph
the words dont go together very well but i see the point your trying to get across and i guess thats all that really counts, right?
12/20/2005 c1 10just a teardrop
this isnt really humorous, i would interpret it in a sad way... but anyway, i like it :D
12/3/2005 c1 Ajna
Short and wonderful. It's sad when we have something we want to write and then something happens to make it go away.
9/17/2005 c1 2omnipojack
its good for a spur of the moment! better than what i woulda written in two seconds...
7/3/2005 c1 12eighteen hundred
This would be better...if you didn't close it by turning the whole thing into a cliche. Sorry, just my opinion.
6/28/2005 c1 52godsandstars
This is very interesting...and although you didn't like my poem, I'm not really an eye for an eye person and I actually like this.
6/23/2005 c1 155X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X
One of the greatest small poems I've ever read. Keep up the great work.
6/22/2005 c1 Parabolic Logic
The punctuation needs to be fixed, first of all.

Okay, so you have a semi-decent idea. You pulled it off with very simplistic wording, and the last two lines are entirely unnecessary to the meaning of the poem. It's too redundant. In a short poem, every phrase, hell, even every WORD should count.

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