
4/24/2006 c1
108zeanomourph
the words dont go together very well but i see the point your trying to get across and i guess thats all that really counts, right?

the words dont go together very well but i see the point your trying to get across and i guess thats all that really counts, right?
12/20/2005 c1
10just a teardrop
this isnt really humorous, i would interpret it in a sad way... but anyway, i like it :D

this isnt really humorous, i would interpret it in a sad way... but anyway, i like it :D
12/3/2005 c1 Ajna
Short and wonderful. It's sad when we have something we want to write and then something happens to make it go away.
Short and wonderful. It's sad when we have something we want to write and then something happens to make it go away.
9/17/2005 c1
2omnipojack
its good for a spur of the moment! better than what i woulda written in two seconds...

its good for a spur of the moment! better than what i woulda written in two seconds...
7/3/2005 c1
12eighteen hundred
This would be better...if you didn't close it by turning the whole thing into a cliche. Sorry, just my opinion.

This would be better...if you didn't close it by turning the whole thing into a cliche. Sorry, just my opinion.
6/28/2005 c1
52godsandstars
This is very interesting...and although you didn't like my poem, I'm not really an eye for an eye person and I actually like this.

This is very interesting...and although you didn't like my poem, I'm not really an eye for an eye person and I actually like this.
6/23/2005 c1
155X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X
One of the greatest small poems I've ever read. Keep up the great work.

One of the greatest small poems I've ever read. Keep up the great work.
6/22/2005 c1 Parabolic Logic
The punctuation needs to be fixed, first of all.
Okay, so you have a semi-decent idea. You pulled it off with very simplistic wording, and the last two lines are entirely unnecessary to the meaning of the poem. It's too redundant. In a short poem, every phrase, hell, even every WORD should count.
The punctuation needs to be fixed, first of all.
Okay, so you have a semi-decent idea. You pulled it off with very simplistic wording, and the last two lines are entirely unnecessary to the meaning of the poem. It's too redundant. In a short poem, every phrase, hell, even every WORD should count.