for RPG Parody3/18/2015 c1 
5reddir
Started off kinda over the top, but the story you got into was clever. I especially liked how Mortrius was neutral at first, giving back Atem-Mentirius' life-force to start the cycle over again and again.
5reddirStarted off kinda over the top, but the story you got into was clever. I especially liked how Mortrius was neutral at first, giving back Atem-Mentirius' life-force to start the cycle over again and again.
6/23/2005 c3 12Lccorp2
Thank you ever so much for spacing your paragraphs in the third chapter. Still, please do try to make larger spacings or insert lines every time you do a scene change of somthing of the sort, to facilitate the reader.
12Lccorp2Thank you ever so much for spacing your paragraphs in the third chapter. Still, please do try to make larger spacings or insert lines every time you do a scene change of somthing of the sort, to facilitate the reader.
6/22/2005 c1 binderem
HA! Wow, this is great. Very overly-dramatic, but funny. Confusing, though. Lots of big, weird words. :) Keep writing.
HA! Wow, this is great. Very overly-dramatic, but funny. Confusing, though. Lots of big, weird words. :) Keep writing.