for Purple Poison4/20/2006 c2 
4Willow Bane
whoa there are so many mistakes in these stories i didnt relize it untill now!
4Willow Banewhoa there are so many mistakes in these stories i didnt relize it untill now!
10/16/2005 c2 6IceAngelDarkMoon
I really like this story so far. I only have two little things to ask about the writing. 1st (and one i'm guilty of as well) is there are a lot of gramer and spelling mistakes. I only mention this because it makes it hard to read at times, and it takes away from the great story. And 2nd you switched point of views in the second chapter, this is usually ok if there is some inndication of a switch. BUt other than that i really liek the story. I like Dai and Yuki. I personally love JRock bands, and the visual kei bands. Hopefully you continue! Sorry if i sound arrogant about the critisims, i just think it would improve a great peice of writing to fix those two things, but it's up to you! Good luck!IciP.S. where were the lyrics from Yuki's song from? Did you write them or borrow?
6IceAngelDarkMoonI really like this story so far. I only have two little things to ask about the writing. 1st (and one i'm guilty of as well) is there are a lot of gramer and spelling mistakes. I only mention this because it makes it hard to read at times, and it takes away from the great story. And 2nd you switched point of views in the second chapter, this is usually ok if there is some inndication of a switch. BUt other than that i really liek the story. I like Dai and Yuki. I personally love JRock bands, and the visual kei bands. Hopefully you continue! Sorry if i sound arrogant about the critisims, i just think it would improve a great peice of writing to fix those two things, but it's up to you! Good luck!IciP.S. where were the lyrics from Yuki's song from? Did you write them or borrow?