for The Desert of Time7/23/2008 c15 Booked
It's so very nice that Elentia can use some manners right before she faints. Hmm. I wonder how many people can do that. /:
It's so very nice that Elentia can use some manners right before she faints. Hmm. I wonder how many people can do that. /:
2/23/2007 c15 
7Ladybug403
Sweet. They finally have some dragons. That will definatly help move everyone to Nezanus. Very intersting chapter, if I do say so myself. Poor Elentia got shot. Hopefully there won't be any permenant damage. :P That would suck. ^_^ Keep up your wonderful writing and say hello to Florida for me. I know it's beautiful there this time of year. ^_^
7Ladybug403Sweet. They finally have some dragons. That will definatly help move everyone to Nezanus. Very intersting chapter, if I do say so myself. Poor Elentia got shot. Hopefully there won't be any permenant damage. :P That would suck. ^_^ Keep up your wonderful writing and say hello to Florida for me. I know it's beautiful there this time of year. ^_^
2/23/2007 c14 Ladybug403
I'm going to have to reread this story to figure out who the two people were at the beginning...or at least get some idea. :P Losing the internet for over six months sucks! ^_^ Anywho, keep up your wonderful writing. ^_^
I'm going to have to reread this story to figure out who the two people were at the beginning...or at least get some idea. :P Losing the internet for over six months sucks! ^_^ Anywho, keep up your wonderful writing. ^_^
2/23/2007 c13 Ladybug403
This chapter has so much fluff in it, I could have added rice crispys and made rice crispy treats. ^_^ I love it! ^_^ Progress is being made in their relationship and I love it! ^_^ Keep up your wonderful writing! ^_^
This chapter has so much fluff in it, I could have added rice crispys and made rice crispy treats. ^_^ I love it! ^_^ Progress is being made in their relationship and I love it! ^_^ Keep up your wonderful writing! ^_^
2/23/2007 c12 Ladybug403
LOL It was inevitable that they kiss again. ^_^ Even if it was by accident. I love how much they both have matured. It makes your story more...enticing. Its interesting to see characters change for the better. ^_^ Keep up your wonderful writing.
LOL It was inevitable that they kiss again. ^_^ Even if it was by accident. I love how much they both have matured. It makes your story more...enticing. Its interesting to see characters change for the better. ^_^ Keep up your wonderful writing.
2/23/2007 c11 Ladybug403
Yay! I can finally review your stories again! Yay!
Sorry had to get that out of my system. Yet again, another great chapter, even if it is sad. :( It will be interesting to see how Bonton, Reko, Karcier, and Elentia can train all those kids. ^_^ I can also guess their's going to be lots of conflict still between Karcier and Elentia. ^_^ Love it. Keep up the good work.
Yay! I can finally review your stories again! Yay!
Sorry had to get that out of my system. Yet again, another great chapter, even if it is sad. :( It will be interesting to see how Bonton, Reko, Karcier, and Elentia can train all those kids. ^_^ I can also guess their's going to be lots of conflict still between Karcier and Elentia. ^_^ Love it. Keep up the good work.
7/15/2006 c15 newby6320
i like it, it's not that random, but you need to elaborate more. can't wait for the next update.-Jess
i like it, it's not that random, but you need to elaborate more. can't wait for the next update.-Jess
7/15/2006 c15 Skeeter the Groundhog
there has to be some misery. life isn't always beautiful, but it's a beautiful life, you know?elentia's last line made me laugh for some odd reason. she is really quite the character. "just shoot him already and worry about me later." ha ha ha!
there has to be some misery. life isn't always beautiful, but it's a beautiful life, you know?elentia's last line made me laugh for some odd reason. she is really quite the character. "just shoot him already and worry about me later." ha ha ha!
7/13/2006 c15 33Nicole.A
It was a good chapter. I pretty much just woke up so I don't really know what else to say right now. Too tired still. Anyway, hope you have fun in Florida.
Keep up the great writing and don't forget to have fun with it.
~**Nicole**~
33Nicole.AIt was a good chapter. I pretty much just woke up so I don't really know what else to say right now. Too tired still. Anyway, hope you have fun in Florida.
Keep up the great writing and don't forget to have fun with it.
~**Nicole**~
7/13/2006 c15 3xxstarcrossedloverxx
great story...ellie and kar are so cute together please dont kill them
3xxstarcrossedloverxxgreat story...ellie and kar are so cute together please dont kill them
7/13/2006 c15 2Viera Wing
Well, I'm not sure if I've commented on some flaws in your fic, but I'm gonna do it anyway. There isn't really much description in your story. Your paragraphs are pretty short, and I'm quite sure you haven't actually given full detail of the city they're in. The battle scene was pretty simple too. And with each different scenes, it would be a lot easier for us if you'd place a border - that line thing FP provides us. Other than that, good build-up.
2Viera WingWell, I'm not sure if I've commented on some flaws in your fic, but I'm gonna do it anyway. There isn't really much description in your story. Your paragraphs are pretty short, and I'm quite sure you haven't actually given full detail of the city they're in. The battle scene was pretty simple too. And with each different scenes, it would be a lot easier for us if you'd place a border - that line thing FP provides us. Other than that, good build-up.
6/29/2006 c1 3JennieMR
OUCH, OUCH, OUCH, OUCH, OUCH! Man, I cringed reading what this girl went through. Good writing! I'll catch a chapter at a time as I can. :-) Thanks!
3JennieMROUCH, OUCH, OUCH, OUCH, OUCH! Man, I cringed reading what this girl went through. Good writing! I'll catch a chapter at a time as I can. :-) Thanks!
6/13/2006 c14 33Nicole.A
Sweet! You got to 100! Now I think it's more like 101 though... Anyway, good chapter. I like the King and the other person - I'm guessing an advisor or someone close to that - dialog in the beginning. Different, but good. Yeah, I can see how Karcier is deeper into the relationship than Elentia is. I'm excited to see what happens now with the King, and if Orlindage will be moved to Nezanus.
Keep up the great writing and don't forget to have fun with it.
Always looking forward to the next chapter.
~**Nicole**~
33Nicole.ASweet! You got to 100! Now I think it's more like 101 though... Anyway, good chapter. I like the King and the other person - I'm guessing an advisor or someone close to that - dialog in the beginning. Different, but good. Yeah, I can see how Karcier is deeper into the relationship than Elentia is. I'm excited to see what happens now with the King, and if Orlindage will be moved to Nezanus.
Keep up the great writing and don't forget to have fun with it.
Always looking forward to the next chapter.
~**Nicole**~