for Heaven Laughing7/1/2005 c1 
17aries-diva-JC
i liked this poem alot... i took it to be about rejecting evilness (is evilness a word? i dont kno lol) 'the dark king' and being a good person... one complaint... the third passage breaks the flow... like before it, you have this rythm established with a certain number of sylables in each line and so on, and the last word of the first line rhymes with the last word of the last line, etc., and i can see how its good that the third passage is different because its like the climax or like the bridge in a song, but i thought it just kind of made things seem choppy... but thats just me being picky... on the other hand, i liked the line 'heavan curves laughing out of sight' alot and how it was repeated at the end (only with 'reach' instead of 'sight') once again, great job over all... keep up the good work... btw, if u have time, i would love reviews on sum of my work, especially 'once in a blue moon'... thnx...
17aries-diva-JCi liked this poem alot... i took it to be about rejecting evilness (is evilness a word? i dont kno lol) 'the dark king' and being a good person... one complaint... the third passage breaks the flow... like before it, you have this rythm established with a certain number of sylables in each line and so on, and the last word of the first line rhymes with the last word of the last line, etc., and i can see how its good that the third passage is different because its like the climax or like the bridge in a song, but i thought it just kind of made things seem choppy... but thats just me being picky... on the other hand, i liked the line 'heavan curves laughing out of sight' alot and how it was repeated at the end (only with 'reach' instead of 'sight') once again, great job over all... keep up the good work... btw, if u have time, i would love reviews on sum of my work, especially 'once in a blue moon'... thnx...