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10/24/2005 c1 Needa S
Wow! Your descriptions are full of beauty, it does make one want to go see this awesome place. Excellent write. Thank ya for your kind reviews. God Bless ya!

Needa S.
10/20/2005 c1 25MacNWoody
its really a good poem, of course, I like it cause it shows a different perspective of things...really good though, and thanks for the review! t2ul!
7/14/2005 c1 3Pont
Hm Israel... so that's what's drawn all of my friends there this summer :D

Nicely done. Paints a good picture, a sense of peace and all-around holiness. Makes me want to board the next flight :P

Sure, I'll check out clodhopper's story. No sweat. If you ever have anything else you want me to read don't hesitate to ask!

~ponteh
7/13/2005 c1 1Clodhopper
a simple poem, nice and sweet. a little simple - i think i like ur older ones better cuz they had more...of a goal to em, but as u said this one could still use some work. Not to say this was a bad one, because it wasnt. good job

~Mack
7/4/2005 c1 7TigHan
wow, you've been to israel? i bet it was interesting. this poem seems to capture your feelings as you sat looking out the bus window well. i think the rhyming scheme is a little too much, but thats just me. the poem is blatantly true and i'm glad you chose to show this side of the country.
7/1/2005 c1 4Slyph
Hmm...At the beginning I wasn't very impressed. Towards the middle it got pretty good, and the end as well. I especially liked this part, "The land is portrayed

As no more than desert and sand.

But the view from the window

Is like the touch of God’s hand."

That was really good! ^-^

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