for The Collective Poems of B Laures12/24/2005 c9 
5Jane Paul
Dearest Miss Laures,
Again, this work is very entertaining. It is sad, yet oh so funny. Good Job
Jane Paul
5Jane PaulDearest Miss Laures,
Again, this work is very entertaining. It is sad, yet oh so funny. Good Job
Jane Paul
12/23/2005 c2 Jane Paul
Dearest Miss Laures,
Very beautiful work. This is a wonderful poem which allows my mind to freely play. Good job.
Jane Paul
Dearest Miss Laures,
Very beautiful work. This is a wonderful poem which allows my mind to freely play. Good job.
Jane Paul
12/20/2005 c1 Blaise Pascal
My dear,ALthough you may have a point with the ever growing hardened hearts of our young today. However, the sad events that took place involving your friends and you have nothing to do with the subject at hand. How am I supposed to know about your readings? Of course you know what Brimsdale is and how it became the morbid place it is. I, on the other hand, do not. When one writes he/she must include clear explanations along with passion and spirit. No doubt that you have passion, however your cognitive ingredient is missing.
-Blaise
My dear,ALthough you may have a point with the ever growing hardened hearts of our young today. However, the sad events that took place involving your friends and you have nothing to do with the subject at hand. How am I supposed to know about your readings? Of course you know what Brimsdale is and how it became the morbid place it is. I, on the other hand, do not. When one writes he/she must include clear explanations along with passion and spirit. No doubt that you have passion, however your cognitive ingredient is missing.
-Blaise
12/19/2005 c1 Katherine
Hello Briette. You have an interesting style with poetry. Kinda morbid, scarry. But all in all it is pretty good. Except I am not sure where you are going with this whole thing. :)
Katherine
Hello Briette. You have an interesting style with poetry. Kinda morbid, scarry. But all in all it is pretty good. Except I am not sure where you are going with this whole thing. :)
Katherine
12/19/2005 c1 Blaise Pascal
This story is one of despair and hate. I sense great trials in this writers life. Perhaps "Brimsdale"is a place in her life. Maybe her house, or her school, somewhere where she is struggling. The point is not so clear. As I read this I am not sure of the point it is trying to make. Although poetry is preferred to be deep and require a significant amount of thought, this, to me, is pointless. For example, you explain how "Brimsdale" is a horrible place, however, how did it become that way? I know that it is bad from your sentence "Death rows preferred an injection than banishment to Brimsdale border" but why? What caused this evil, hate. Why... what?
-Blaise
This story is one of despair and hate. I sense great trials in this writers life. Perhaps "Brimsdale"is a place in her life. Maybe her house, or her school, somewhere where she is struggling. The point is not so clear. As I read this I am not sure of the point it is trying to make. Although poetry is preferred to be deep and require a significant amount of thought, this, to me, is pointless. For example, you explain how "Brimsdale" is a horrible place, however, how did it become that way? I know that it is bad from your sentence "Death rows preferred an injection than banishment to Brimsdale border" but why? What caused this evil, hate. Why... what?
-Blaise