for Blossoms in August12/12/2006 c2 
9GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
Hey!
Loved Craig in this chapter... He sounds like the guy I would be hanging out with...
I love your character interactions again... However, I think that David is going to turn out to be a stink... Maybe I'm wrong, but I am getting this negative vibe from him... Hm...
Anyhoo, I guess you can see I like the ellipse...
I'm really glad that you had someone bring up the necklace. It takes a step away from the ordinary where everyone else seems oblivious to everything the main character is doing. Instead, there is a realistic memory and interest on the part of the secondary characters regarding the necklace...
Great job, I'm off to the next chapter next time I get a chance...
~GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
9GryphonFledglingOfSilverWingsHey!
Loved Craig in this chapter... He sounds like the guy I would be hanging out with...
I love your character interactions again... However, I think that David is going to turn out to be a stink... Maybe I'm wrong, but I am getting this negative vibe from him... Hm...
Anyhoo, I guess you can see I like the ellipse...
I'm really glad that you had someone bring up the necklace. It takes a step away from the ordinary where everyone else seems oblivious to everything the main character is doing. Instead, there is a realistic memory and interest on the part of the secondary characters regarding the necklace...
Great job, I'm off to the next chapter next time I get a chance...
~GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
12/9/2006 c1 GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
Interesting beginning to what sounds like a great story...
The whole part about the pale man and the blossoms was rather chilling. The humorous dialogue just served to make it moreso, since it wasn't recieved as well as it was meant to be on Natasha's part. Very neat...
My only negative-ish comment would be on the issue of the alarm clock. In fantasy stories (and just about any other genre) alarm clock beginnings are overdone... You did it pretty well, but it is coming to the point where it doesn't matter how well you do it, it is always cliched... If you can come up with some different beginning, your story might have more credibility from the start.
But anyhoo, I really liked this, especially the character interactions... There were a few mispellings ("died his hair" should be "dyed") but they are not all that much and could easily be picked out if you had someone do a proofread for you or you do one yourself...
Great job!
~GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
Interesting beginning to what sounds like a great story...
The whole part about the pale man and the blossoms was rather chilling. The humorous dialogue just served to make it moreso, since it wasn't recieved as well as it was meant to be on Natasha's part. Very neat...
My only negative-ish comment would be on the issue of the alarm clock. In fantasy stories (and just about any other genre) alarm clock beginnings are overdone... You did it pretty well, but it is coming to the point where it doesn't matter how well you do it, it is always cliched... If you can come up with some different beginning, your story might have more credibility from the start.
But anyhoo, I really liked this, especially the character interactions... There were a few mispellings ("died his hair" should be "dyed") but they are not all that much and could easily be picked out if you had someone do a proofread for you or you do one yourself...
Great job!
~GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
12/9/2006 c15 8DCXX
Hey! Sorry in advanced for the short review, 'cause I got some homework I should be doing. Hehe. I must admit, I didn't think you'd have a whole chapter on David's party, but it fit in well. Ohh, I just wanna see Natasha figure out he's a vampyre already! Humph. An evil on at that. I wish I could throttle his neck. I'm also interested on what he want's with Faira. Wonder how she'll tie in with all this...Hope she doesn't turn to 'the dark side'...Dun dun da! Oh, yeah, sorry I haven't replied to your review yet! I really wanna type up this next chapter fast, even when I do have homework (which is a mirical in itself) but i've had full days the last week (I don't think i'll be as busy this week though). Damn exams are coming fast too. I'll reply and update as soon as I can though! Well, better get this homework done, so I can type. See ya, and continue soon!
8DCXXHey! Sorry in advanced for the short review, 'cause I got some homework I should be doing. Hehe. I must admit, I didn't think you'd have a whole chapter on David's party, but it fit in well. Ohh, I just wanna see Natasha figure out he's a vampyre already! Humph. An evil on at that. I wish I could throttle his neck. I'm also interested on what he want's with Faira. Wonder how she'll tie in with all this...Hope she doesn't turn to 'the dark side'...Dun dun da! Oh, yeah, sorry I haven't replied to your review yet! I really wanna type up this next chapter fast, even when I do have homework (which is a mirical in itself) but i've had full days the last week (I don't think i'll be as busy this week though). Damn exams are coming fast too. I'll reply and update as soon as I can though! Well, better get this homework done, so I can type. See ya, and continue soon!
11/28/2006 c14 1happiness by the kilowatt
I am so very happy to hear someone talking about Hayley Westenra. Being from New Zealand it's always lovely to hear people mentioning our stars. If you like her old CD you should listen to her new one, she reaches new wows with her voice. She is what angels sound like to me :). The song is very fitting to the chapter. When I read it I was listening to the song as you recommended and it fit lovely. It is a very touching end to the chapter, will be interesting to see how it develops. Looking forward, ever so eagerly to the next chapter.
Danika
1happiness by the kilowattI am so very happy to hear someone talking about Hayley Westenra. Being from New Zealand it's always lovely to hear people mentioning our stars. If you like her old CD you should listen to her new one, she reaches new wows with her voice. She is what angels sound like to me :). The song is very fitting to the chapter. When I read it I was listening to the song as you recommended and it fit lovely. It is a very touching end to the chapter, will be interesting to see how it develops. Looking forward, ever so eagerly to the next chapter.
Danika
11/16/2006 c14 8DCXX
You continued? Funny, I didn't get an e-mail...Oh well...Anyway, this chapter was just, just so cute at the end! AW! Scott is so awsome, looking for a way to be human for Natasha. I wish guys in storys could be real, they're so great (especially when you write about them). So Faira's finally in the picture again...I still don't trust David...obviously a meany vampy he is (Wow, I did a Yoda...). Erm, anyway, I don't quite get why Tim's so devote with this fighting or vampyre stuff...I still think he's hiding something. But I found it funny when Natasha beat up Scott! Hehehe...But the cutie ending was the best. I feel all warm and fuzzy inside! Yay for chapter!
8DCXXYou continued? Funny, I didn't get an e-mail...Oh well...Anyway, this chapter was just, just so cute at the end! AW! Scott is so awsome, looking for a way to be human for Natasha. I wish guys in storys could be real, they're so great (especially when you write about them). So Faira's finally in the picture again...I still don't trust David...obviously a meany vampy he is (Wow, I did a Yoda...). Erm, anyway, I don't quite get why Tim's so devote with this fighting or vampyre stuff...I still think he's hiding something. But I found it funny when Natasha beat up Scott! Hehehe...But the cutie ending was the best. I feel all warm and fuzzy inside! Yay for chapter!
11/12/2006 c8 4tabiscus
um...justa quick spelling-thingey..."mienes" isnt german for mine. its meine, or meinen, depending on how ur using it. so yeah.
4tabiscusum...justa quick spelling-thingey..."mienes" isnt german for mine. its meine, or meinen, depending on how ur using it. so yeah.
11/9/2006 c13 8DCXX
Wow...erm...SO MANY MORE SECRETS! T_T Now I have so many more things to figure out...YOUR SO EVIL! (well, not really *remembers pail and water incident* well...lol)Ok, so Natasha crossed into a vampyre relam of sorts? Well, the most obvious questions are...what for and why? How is obvious, as are the other three w's, but why have a spaz attack while looking at Anthony? Does it got anything to do with his mention of Shamiran looking for a host...Eugh, that don't sound to good...And I'm really starting to wonder about ol' Donovyn and Anthony's past relationship. From what I remember from reading before they've kinda swiched roles or something. And how the heck do you share a realm? Man, you do know how to pose a difficult challenge...this trying to figure out whats gonna happen is so hard! Your an awsomely good writer. You'd better give us some info soon...please?:( I won't pour water on you head-I mean I'll love you if you do! Please?
8DCXXWow...erm...SO MANY MORE SECRETS! T_T Now I have so many more things to figure out...YOUR SO EVIL! (well, not really *remembers pail and water incident* well...lol)Ok, so Natasha crossed into a vampyre relam of sorts? Well, the most obvious questions are...what for and why? How is obvious, as are the other three w's, but why have a spaz attack while looking at Anthony? Does it got anything to do with his mention of Shamiran looking for a host...Eugh, that don't sound to good...And I'm really starting to wonder about ol' Donovyn and Anthony's past relationship. From what I remember from reading before they've kinda swiched roles or something. And how the heck do you share a realm? Man, you do know how to pose a difficult challenge...this trying to figure out whats gonna happen is so hard! Your an awsomely good writer. You'd better give us some info soon...please?:( I won't pour water on you head-I mean I'll love you if you do! Please?
10/4/2006 c12 DCXX
Well...talk about spilling the beans...So much info in one chapter! After so long even! Gee, I'd better go re-read some stuff so I remember what happened... Not complaining though! Totally awsome that you continued ^_^! I wish it was working so well for me...T_T. Anyway, about the chapter. Well first off I gotta say I'm relieved. When I heard the words 'new student' I was like 'OH CRAP! its Donovyn isnt it? PLEASE dont be him!'But it was good old Scotty. YAY! And phew. Though I must say I was surprised at Timothy's reaction...I thought he mighta started poniting at Scott and cursing him or something. He really didn't know about the vampyres? I always had the feeling that may have been one of the things he was hiding...but maybe it still is and he covering his knowledge.Argg! You make you stories so damned secretive! :(! I wish I could figure it out...Oh well...So they all gonna go to the caves now? Natasha has super powers? The Necklace may have been explained in more detail, but where is that Shamiran chick? Could it be Anthony thats actually the Miotohyt? Gahh...TOO MANY UNANSWERED QUESTIONS!You'd better update soon or my brain's gonna explode! And I don't wanna clean that mess up...
Well...talk about spilling the beans...So much info in one chapter! After so long even! Gee, I'd better go re-read some stuff so I remember what happened... Not complaining though! Totally awsome that you continued ^_^! I wish it was working so well for me...T_T. Anyway, about the chapter. Well first off I gotta say I'm relieved. When I heard the words 'new student' I was like 'OH CRAP! its Donovyn isnt it? PLEASE dont be him!'But it was good old Scotty. YAY! And phew. Though I must say I was surprised at Timothy's reaction...I thought he mighta started poniting at Scott and cursing him or something. He really didn't know about the vampyres? I always had the feeling that may have been one of the things he was hiding...but maybe it still is and he covering his knowledge.Argg! You make you stories so damned secretive! :(! I wish I could figure it out...Oh well...So they all gonna go to the caves now? Natasha has super powers? The Necklace may have been explained in more detail, but where is that Shamiran chick? Could it be Anthony thats actually the Miotohyt? Gahh...TOO MANY UNANSWERED QUESTIONS!You'd better update soon or my brain's gonna explode! And I don't wanna clean that mess up...
8/9/2006 c11 1happiness by the kilowatt
I just think that you are fantastic. And that chapter was most certainly worth the wait. It was a beautiful. A sad, serene, intensity. I very much look forward to the next chapter.
1happiness by the kilowattI just think that you are fantastic. And that chapter was most certainly worth the wait. It was a beautiful. A sad, serene, intensity. I very much look forward to the next chapter.
6/24/2006 c11 8DCXX
O.O. Whoa...that was fast. Way to go Scott! You're father then Kage anyway...lol. Quite a surprising chapter though, wasn't expecting something so impacting after the long pause (by the way congrats on getting over the writers block...at least somebody has...*sigh*) I thought the part where Anthony would be introduce would be far more informing, but it seems to have giving me a lot more things to think about...Always so elusive in your writing...humph, I wish I could figure some of this out, at least what ol' Donny's up to. And what Natasha has to do with the mix, other then the necklace of course. And Scott being do direct about turning her, and his feelings! Guess the boy still needs to learn a bit about subtly. lol. Oh yes, and thanks for the dedication too! I'm honoureded ^_^! Well, that's all i really gots to say this time 'round. Be waiting paciently for your next chap, and in the meantime trying to get my next one out...
8DCXXO.O. Whoa...that was fast. Way to go Scott! You're father then Kage anyway...lol. Quite a surprising chapter though, wasn't expecting something so impacting after the long pause (by the way congrats on getting over the writers block...at least somebody has...*sigh*) I thought the part where Anthony would be introduce would be far more informing, but it seems to have giving me a lot more things to think about...Always so elusive in your writing...humph, I wish I could figure some of this out, at least what ol' Donny's up to. And what Natasha has to do with the mix, other then the necklace of course. And Scott being do direct about turning her, and his feelings! Guess the boy still needs to learn a bit about subtly. lol. Oh yes, and thanks for the dedication too! I'm honoureded ^_^! Well, that's all i really gots to say this time 'round. Be waiting paciently for your next chap, and in the meantime trying to get my next one out...
3/3/2006 c10 5jesums
omfg! wow... i have been waiting for this update for ages and ages and ages...
i am jesums btw! sorry i didnt review.. but life has complications.. like over going my download limit.*cough*
well.. let me say that this is awsome and you have to update soon or i will die! i swear i will.
lol.. awsome! loves
5jesumsomfg! wow... i have been waiting for this update for ages and ages and ages...
i am jesums btw! sorry i didnt review.. but life has complications.. like over going my download limit.*cough*
well.. let me say that this is awsome and you have to update soon or i will die! i swear i will.
lol.. awsome! loves
3/2/2006 c10 1happiness by the kilowatt
Hmm ... I almost don't like that she introduced Craig into her little vampire world. I know that it's probably necessary but yeah ... it almost annoyed me that she did. The chapter was still very good though and the beginning with the fight between Natasha and Vogue was very cool.
Will write you a comment on 'A Coward's Wisdom' at some stage, I promise! Am back at school and the time I spend on the computer is limited, sorry!
Look forward to next chapter!
1happiness by the kilowattHmm ... I almost don't like that she introduced Craig into her little vampire world. I know that it's probably necessary but yeah ... it almost annoyed me that she did. The chapter was still very good though and the beginning with the fight between Natasha and Vogue was very cool.
Will write you a comment on 'A Coward's Wisdom' at some stage, I promise! Am back at school and the time I spend on the computer is limited, sorry!
Look forward to next chapter!
2/23/2006 c10 HeartsQuiverInFear
well hello :] how's it going? i havent read this wonderful story in a while so i think i spent like one hour reading over all the chapters to figure out how everything went. Aren't i a loyal reader? :] teehee. anyways..i'm glad your back and writing again..this chapter proves that being away from your stories for a while isn't so bad; since it was so obviously amazingly written. Hmm i think this review is going to end up being one of my long ones :p. Soo where should i start? oh i know..i think i'll do the usual critism & then the compliments :) there's not much to really criticize about, only for a couple of spelling errors every now and then, nothing big; either than that it was perfect. I love your descriptions, they're really detailed and it's really easy to picture what the character's, specifically Vogue/Scott in this chapter look like. Vogue/Scott is quickly becoming one of my favorite characters in this story, he's just so easy to love :) so, i shall end this review on a good note. I really hope you update soon, i extremely adore this story, and i hope you continue writing. -Raine.
well hello :] how's it going? i havent read this wonderful story in a while so i think i spent like one hour reading over all the chapters to figure out how everything went. Aren't i a loyal reader? :] teehee. anyways..i'm glad your back and writing again..this chapter proves that being away from your stories for a while isn't so bad; since it was so obviously amazingly written. Hmm i think this review is going to end up being one of my long ones :p. Soo where should i start? oh i know..i think i'll do the usual critism & then the compliments :) there's not much to really criticize about, only for a couple of spelling errors every now and then, nothing big; either than that it was perfect. I love your descriptions, they're really detailed and it's really easy to picture what the character's, specifically Vogue/Scott in this chapter look like. Vogue/Scott is quickly becoming one of my favorite characters in this story, he's just so easy to love :) so, i shall end this review on a good note. I really hope you update soon, i extremely adore this story, and i hope you continue writing. -Raine.
1/22/2006 c9 happiness by the kilowatt
Wow, this story is so wonderfully crafted and written. I love it! You write beautifully!
I don't really know what to say, I'm still flabbergasted by it.
I look forward to the next chapter though! And you finished with such an exciting ending that it's just plain cruel!
Wow, this story is so wonderfully crafted and written. I love it! You write beautifully!
I don't really know what to say, I'm still flabbergasted by it.
I look forward to the next chapter though! And you finished with such an exciting ending that it's just plain cruel!