for One Day, Someday6/6/2007 c1 
4under the influence
Very well written...poor Darlene, even though she brought it on herself
4under the influenceVery well written...poor Darlene, even though she brought it on herself
5/21/2006 c1 5Leighton Carrington
this was actually an enjoyable short, i didn't notice any typos, and there is something to be learned from it. So it's all in all a success. good job.
5Leighton Carringtonthis was actually an enjoyable short, i didn't notice any typos, and there is something to be learned from it. So it's all in all a success. good job.
5/18/2006 c1 FuckU
That's nice. I kinda feel sorry for Darlene. You have a strong imagination and strong writing, you're bound for succes! Lots of Luck!
That's nice. I kinda feel sorry for Darlene. You have a strong imagination and strong writing, you're bound for succes! Lots of Luck!
4/15/2006 c1 50fairEtales
I really like this. The images were so real, I felt like I was standing there. Great work!
50fairEtalesI really like this. The images were so real, I felt like I was standing there. Great work!
12/31/2005 c1 hey maria
I really hated Darlene, but the ending made me feel a little sorry for her. This was a well-written story; keep writing.
I really hated Darlene, but the ending made me feel a little sorry for her. This was a well-written story; keep writing.
9/11/2005 c1 2phishcat
I think it's awesome that your one-shots are connected in little ways. I had to glance over "Yesterday's Innocence" again because I'd forgotten that the character's name was Stephanie, but now it all makes sense!
I like the writing in this story, it's done in a very descriptive style that's nice for a one-shot because it fills it out a little, makes it more worthwhile to read. I can't wait to see where this story goes next.
2phishcatI think it's awesome that your one-shots are connected in little ways. I had to glance over "Yesterday's Innocence" again because I'd forgotten that the character's name was Stephanie, but now it all makes sense!
I like the writing in this story, it's done in a very descriptive style that's nice for a one-shot because it fills it out a little, makes it more worthwhile to read. I can't wait to see where this story goes next.
8/24/2005 c1 149Pose For Me
I had liked Darlene up until Cathy called. I can understand liking someone so much it hurts to see them with another person, but going through the process of ruining their life just to get revenge? That's absurd and quite cruel. I think scientists or other persons of authority would call it an obsession that got too out of hand.
I like this one-shot. I don't really see a need for a continuation, unless you want to tell us of what happened after this day. I can only imagine what the relationship would be like. One word: Horrible.
In a PS to this review, I would like to thank you for reviewing two of my pieces and favoriting two of them. I appreciate it.
Regina O.B.
149Pose For MeI had liked Darlene up until Cathy called. I can understand liking someone so much it hurts to see them with another person, but going through the process of ruining their life just to get revenge? That's absurd and quite cruel. I think scientists or other persons of authority would call it an obsession that got too out of hand.
I like this one-shot. I don't really see a need for a continuation, unless you want to tell us of what happened after this day. I can only imagine what the relationship would be like. One word: Horrible.
In a PS to this review, I would like to thank you for reviewing two of my pieces and favoriting two of them. I appreciate it.
Regina O.B.
8/24/2005 c1 11Jaclyn Curler
this was really good, though the chracters were a little confusing to follow at the beginning. it became clearer near the end though.
and thanks for reviewing Defy all Odds, which is getting a different name: Friend or Foe. just a heads up on that note.
11Jaclyn Curlerthis was really good, though the chracters were a little confusing to follow at the beginning. it became clearer near the end though.
and thanks for reviewing Defy all Odds, which is getting a different name: Friend or Foe. just a heads up on that note.
8/20/2005 c1 8Barbados
Again, your skill at instilling the raw emotion of your characters into your readers is impressive, as is your ability to portray a sense of realism. I'm jealous :P Eyetk beat me to the one real point of CC I had, (that'd be CC part B.) I understand you're busy with Gryphon's Feather and Defiance & Glory, but give us another glimpse soon, k?
8BarbadosAgain, your skill at instilling the raw emotion of your characters into your readers is impressive, as is your ability to portray a sense of realism. I'm jealous :P Eyetk beat me to the one real point of CC I had, (that'd be CC part B.) I understand you're busy with Gryphon's Feather and Defiance & Glory, but give us another glimpse soon, k?
8/11/2005 c1 28Darthen
Oh, damn. This is good. Really good. The characterization, the plot, the well developed sentences and paragraghs. All perfect. Excellent. Truly excellent.
28DarthenOh, damn. This is good. Really good. The characterization, the plot, the well developed sentences and paragraghs. All perfect. Excellent. Truly excellent.
8/11/2005 c1 10E.V. Delacy
I really liked this,it was very good. The description, the plot, just the whole thing was great, and it kept me intrested! It was very sad, and creative.
Keep on writing! You are a very good writer!
10E.V. DelacyI really liked this,it was very good. The description, the plot, just the whole thing was great, and it kept me intrested! It was very sad, and creative.
Keep on writing! You are a very good writer!
8/9/2005 c1 15Caelestis Leaena
this is an incredible story. for a one-shot you have packed it with so much subtle detail the reader feels they really know the characters despite the fact you only meet them for such a short time. i am incredibly impressed!
15Caelestis Leaenathis is an incredible story. for a one-shot you have packed it with so much subtle detail the reader feels they really know the characters despite the fact you only meet them for such a short time. i am incredibly impressed!
8/4/2005 c1 2AKulbaba
(gah! this wouldn't let me review yesterday, so forgive me if it's a bit short and very to the point) Great story, i liked how you let the characters develop themselves, and i liked how real the story seemed, the characters as well. When you used the dash you seemed to use it a lot, but everyone has a favourite punctuation mark (i overuse semi-colons), but it worked very well with the story. I thought that the story was the perfect length and that it was well thought out. good job, and good luck on your future stories (though judging by your review count, you don't need luck)
2AKulbaba(gah! this wouldn't let me review yesterday, so forgive me if it's a bit short and very to the point) Great story, i liked how you let the characters develop themselves, and i liked how real the story seemed, the characters as well. When you used the dash you seemed to use it a lot, but everyone has a favourite punctuation mark (i overuse semi-colons), but it worked very well with the story. I thought that the story was the perfect length and that it was well thought out. good job, and good luck on your future stories (though judging by your review count, you don't need luck)
8/2/2005 c1 133Dying Rose
this is great, a wonderful continuation of the one story . Very powerful, thank you for writing it. And a great way to tell how we so easily play ourselves into disaster...
133Dying Rosethis is great, a wonderful continuation of the one story . Very powerful, thank you for writing it. And a great way to tell how we so easily play ourselves into disaster...