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11/20/2005 c2 124in theory
Pretty, and your pen name interested me too. Nice work :)
10/21/2005 c8 David Stephen
Wow - these poems are so heartfelt and I can tell they have come from the heart. You write with a lovely flare - continue! Thank you for my review for TRRT- it is very much appreciated! :) ~DS~
8/26/2005 c8 5teendramaqueen2005
hey, these are really good! Keep up the great work
8/11/2005 c7 29Katterree Fengari
hmm...again the tone feels, I don't know, skewed. A little too much repitition on the "5 years" I think. But good rhythm. However, I have no idea what happened to the speaker.
8/11/2005 c6 Katterree Fengari
um...oddly enough, it feels like you're telling the story from an outside perspective. Like, if you had it in third person instead of first, it would make sense.

I mean, the bitter "life made me this way" fits, but saying that "I have an...attititude" and "hoping/ that one day/ I will live" just feels like a conflicting tone to me. Psychologically, it doesn't make sense, I don't know...maybe if it were after-the-fact.

There's also some typos on the line "lite up m life" 'lit' and 'my' instead, I think.

I do like the repitition of "wishing/ hoping" that works well.
8/7/2005 c3 21Lady Lucia
"is it right to wake up everyday and dread the sun?"

I love that line.
8/7/2005 c2 Lady Lucia
OH! very nice and descriptive. i liked it alot!
8/7/2005 c8 6DragonFaeLynn
Beautiful work.
8/7/2005 c7 DragonFaeLynn
5 years is a long time. Maybe something really great will change your life in the future and you'll go back to being happy and carefree.
8/7/2005 c6 DragonFaeLynn
Yep, I go through that every single day.

It's definitely a trip.
8/7/2005 c5 DragonFaeLynn
I guess you just have to make yourself open up to people. I have to. It's really hard, but sometimes, it can make life a lot easier.
8/7/2005 c4 DragonFaeLynn
Hmm... Yeah... Life's a bitch.
8/7/2005 c3 DragonFaeLynn
That. Is. Exactly. How. I. Feel.

Enough said.

Awesome poem
8/7/2005 c2 DragonFaeLynn
Cute. I like it.
8/2/2005 c1 21Lady Lucia
P.S. "the prophecy" sounds cool!
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