for Tears4/3/2006 c1 
99cygnus olor
beautiful imagery... it seems from what i've read in your other poems, you're quite sad... read "nobody understands" from my collection... hope you can see some relation with what i felt then...
hope you'll end up with a brighter smile at the end of the day...
keep writing!
* ner *
99cygnus olorbeautiful imagery... it seems from what i've read in your other poems, you're quite sad... read "nobody understands" from my collection... hope you can see some relation with what i felt then...
hope you'll end up with a brighter smile at the end of the day...
keep writing!
* ner *
9/28/2005 c1 55SadnessWaterfall
"Tomorrow, the river will still flow… perhaps the tears no longer will."
So beautiful! It expresses so much.Sad, and hopefull, and just plain wonderful!
Hugs K
55SadnessWaterfall"Tomorrow, the river will still flow… perhaps the tears no longer will."
So beautiful! It expresses so much.Sad, and hopefull, and just plain wonderful!
Hugs K
8/18/2005 c1 17rubbadukleeng
really impressive work you have, you use incredible details in your work!
angel
17rubbadukleengreally impressive work you have, you use incredible details in your work!
angel
8/16/2005 c1 mistressKC
simple, yet very heartfelt
simple, yet very heartfelt
7/19/2005 c1 The Postscript
The imagry is beautiful in this...from the first word to the last word. There is emotion that everyone can relate to but in a fresh, new perspective. Beautiful work. Keep writing.
The imagry is beautiful in this...from the first word to the last word. There is emotion that everyone can relate to but in a fresh, new perspective. Beautiful work. Keep writing.
7/19/2005 c1 73An Inside Joke
You need to revise. A couple of times, you refered to your tears in plural sense, but then, halfway through the sentence, switched to singular. You also need to be consistent with tense, and be careful with puntuation.
73An Inside JokeYou need to revise. A couple of times, you refered to your tears in plural sense, but then, halfway through the sentence, switched to singular. You also need to be consistent with tense, and be careful with puntuation.