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8/13/2005 c1 64atalantea
I like the way you started the 1st and last stanzas, it made this interesting. Try to find a new way of saying certain things because they seem heard, written and read lots of times already. :D
7/22/2005 c1 12eighteen hundred
Ehh... It was sort of cliche. The style itself wasn't bad; you seem to know how to word the lines, what words to use, all that shit. But the subject was just... Not so great, in my opinion. I know its just my preferences, but it would improve the piece just in general if you tried to take the same subject and twist it to give everyone a new perspective.
7/21/2005 c1 24Ebony Stars
"Many was the amount...""Numerous was the amount..." a great idea. Really caught my attention and I loved the (space) too. *Ebony*

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