
9/2/2006 c1
1Infinite Abyss
I really like this story so far. It was funny. But I notice it's been a long time since you updated. Please write more soon.

I really like this story so far. It was funny. But I notice it's been a long time since you updated. Please write more soon.
8/28/2006 c1 maddening
So, from what I have read, it seems pretty good. The way you write things just really draws a person in. I hope you update soon, because I'm interested. Your stories make me laugh! (That's a good thing.)
So, from what I have read, it seems pretty good. The way you write things just really draws a person in. I hope you update soon, because I'm interested. Your stories make me laugh! (That's a good thing.)
7/24/2006 c1
6Mali Steelwing
Too funny. I love the bit about the window guys. I hope you update this soon. It's been a year already.

Too funny. I love the bit about the window guys. I hope you update this soon. It's been a year already.
7/22/2005 c1 Janie
Love this story! It's awesome, and Hailey/Halle is hilarious!
One thing though... Could you maybe say what she looks like? Other than that... It's great!
Keep up the good work and update!
Love this story! It's awesome, and Hailey/Halle is hilarious!
One thing though... Could you maybe say what she looks like? Other than that... It's great!
Keep up the good work and update!
7/22/2005 c1 Ruq
Coolio! Keep it up, Im liking this story... Update! Tata
Coolio! Keep it up, Im liking this story... Update! Tata
7/22/2005 c1
20Ashes of Marie
The concept is somewhat old, with there being a corporation that delegates heroes, but you did manage to put a slight 'Office Space' spin on it with this first chapter.
The writing is decent but you need to work on your characterizations in the next chapters because right now they incredibly 2-D and well . . . unrealisitic. I mean, you have shown that Halle has a temper problem, but through the stream of conciousness point-of-view, which is what you're doing instead of strict first person, it somewhat blows it out of proportion.
Anyways, good job and keep up the work. ^^

The concept is somewhat old, with there being a corporation that delegates heroes, but you did manage to put a slight 'Office Space' spin on it with this first chapter.
The writing is decent but you need to work on your characterizations in the next chapters because right now they incredibly 2-D and well . . . unrealisitic. I mean, you have shown that Halle has a temper problem, but through the stream of conciousness point-of-view, which is what you're doing instead of strict first person, it somewhat blows it out of proportion.
Anyways, good job and keep up the work. ^^
7/21/2005 c1
12Monev11235
*Reading and liking*The is a little overexaggerated, but aside from that, no real big problems. Oh, and write more. Or else. *Waves knife*
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Revieww me?

*Reading and liking*The is a little overexaggerated, but aside from that, no real big problems. Oh, and write more. Or else. *Waves knife*
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Revieww me?